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In the past, Male and female rank different, wherein female under male level and female has limited latitude. in the universities most of male than female in every subjects but after appearing gender equality, female latitude wider even almost equivale v.2

In the past, Male and female rank different, wherein female under male level and female has limited latitude. in the universities most of male than female in every subjects but after appearing gender equality, female latitude wider even almost equivale v. 2
It is irrefutable to say that from the past to today’s life, gender equality still exists in various aspects of life. It is claimed by the section of the people that in the past, males have higher educational degrees as compared to females and now it is reversed and females have explored their selves more than men. I strongly agree with this and I will delve deeply about such type of issue in this essay. Firstly, in the past, owing to narrow mind thinking or religious matters, it was not allowed to women to get education, right to vote and even they could not show their faces to male community. Therefore, very limited women could get education at basic level and going to universities was like swim across the sea for them, resulted, they get married and handle only the household activities. Secondly, due to globalization and gender equality, nowadays entries of the women in the higher education institutions is mushrooming. In the past, because of the separate institutions, courses was very limited for the females like home science, nursing, stitching etcetera. However, these days a girl can choose any kind of subject for education, she can do engineering, get education of space, marines and many more. Moreover, equilibrium has raised the job opportunities in each profession for the both gender, resulted ranking of girls are increasing in the universities. To conclude, receiving of males and females in equal in the universities can grow up the level of research and the productivity. Moreover females can think free and explore more.
It is irrefutable to say that from the
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past
to
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today
’s life, gender equality
still
exists in various aspects of life. It
is claimed
by the section of the
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people
that in the
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past
, males have higher educational degrees as compared to
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females
and
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now
it
is reversed
and
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females
have explored their selves more than
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men
. I
strongly
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agree
with this and I will delve
deeply
about such type of issue in this essay.

Firstly
, in the
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past
, owing to narrow mind thinking or religious matters, it was not
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allowed
to women to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
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education
, right to vote and even they could not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
their faces to male community.
Therefore
,
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very
limited women could
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get
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education
at basic level and going to universities was like swim across the sea for them, resulted, they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
married and handle
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only
the household activities.

Secondly
, due to globalization and gender equality, nowadays entries of the women in the higher
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education
institutions is mushrooming. In the
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past
,
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because
of the separate institutions, courses was
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
limited for the
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females
like home science, nursing, stitching etcetera.
However
, these days a girl can choose any kind of subject for
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education
, she can do engineering,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
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education
of space, marines and
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many
more.
Moreover
, equilibrium has raised the job opportunities in each profession for the both gender, resulted ranking of girls are increasing in the universities.

To conclude
, receiving of males and
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females
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in equal in
the universities can grow up the level of research and the productivity.
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Moreover
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females
can
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think
free and explore more.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS letter In the past, Male and female rank different, wherein female under male level and female has limited latitude. in the universities most of male than female in every subjects but after appearing gender equality, female latitude wider even almost equivale v. 2

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4 paragraphs
260 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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