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You are studying for a qualification and you would like some time off. Write a letter to your manager. In your letterAsk for some time off to complete a qualification. Mention what you will do during your time off. Say how the qualification will help your co v.2

You are studying for a qualification and you would like some time off. Write a letter to your manager. In your letterAsk for some time off to complete a qualification. Mention what you will do during your time off. Say how the qualification will help your co v. 2
Dear Mr. John, I am writing today to ask you to grant me time off from work as I am appearing for Masters in Logistics examinations which are due this month. A fortnight leave will give me a head start as I will have ample of time for preparation. First, I have to visit the university library and pick up syllabus material which will help me to enhance my understanding in the module. Next, I have to follow a schedule every day e. g. memorise principles and theories related to Mathematics, Supply chain management, Financial management and Business communications to get through in my assessments. Upon successful accreditation, my qualification will help to practice management techniques in the warehouse i. e. I will be able to avoid wastage by eliminating activities which are causing them. Added to this, I can help this company to manage inventory efficiently by ordering the required levels of materials only so that spoilage of perishable goods can easily be avoided. As a result of this, our business will be lucrative; which means, profits will rise as a result from reduced expenses. Faithfully, Jack Dan
Dear Mr. John,

I am writing
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today
to ask you to grant me time off from work as I
The verb 'appearing' is a stative verb and sometimes the progressive form is not correct. Try a simple form instead.
am appearing
for Masters in Logistics examinations which are due this month. A fortnight
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leave
will give me a head
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start
as I will have ample of time for preparation.

First
, I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
visit the university library and pick up syllabus material which will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me to enhance my understanding in the module.
Next
, I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
follow a schedule every day
There should be no space here: "e.g.".
e. g.
Possible spelling mistake. 'memorise' is British English.
memorise
principles and theories related to Mathematics, Supply chain management, Financial management and Business communications to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
through in my assessments.

Upon successful accreditation, my qualification will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to practice management techniques in the warehouse
There should be no space here: "i.e.".
i. e.
I will be able to avoid wastage by eliminating activities which are causing them.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Added
to this, I can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
this
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
to manage inventory
efficiently
by ordering the required levels of materials
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that spoilage of perishable
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
goods
can
easily
be avoided
.
As a result
of this, our business will be lucrative; which means, profits will rise
as a result
from
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduced
expenses.

Faithfully
,

Jack Dan
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS letter You are studying for a qualification and you would like some time off. Write a letter to your manager. In your letterAsk for some time off to complete a qualification. Mention what you will do during your time off. Say how the qualification will help your co v. 2

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
188 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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