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You work in an international company. You need to take some time off work. Write a letter toyour employer. In your letter: -Explain why you need this time off-give details of when you want the time off-say who can do your work when you are away v.2

You work in an international company. You need to take some time off work. Write a letter toyour employer. In your letter: -Explain why you need this time off-give details of when you want the time off-say who can do your work when you are away v. 2
Dear Mr. John, I am writing this letter to you to grant me a permission to take a vacation from work. As you know, I am studying master degree in Human Resources which not only broaden my professional skills but also develop my managerial competencies. I have been studying for the more than two years in order to gain the master. I will be taking the exam on 21st of March so that I would like to have two weeks before the exam to prepare and I will return back on Sunday morning after the exam. According to our company policy, I am entitled to take two weeks consecutively to be deducted from annual leave balance. Therefore, I will delegate my colleague David Peter to act as my backup during my absence because he has been working with me since I have commenced my job here, so I will hold a training session for him to undertake my tasks. In the end, thank you for your attention to this matter, and I look forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Mina Michael
Dear Mr. John,

I am writing this letter to you to grant me a permission to take a vacation from work. As you know, I am studying master degree in Human Resources which not
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only
broaden my professional
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skills
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but
also
develop my managerial competencies. I have been studying for the more than two years in order to gain the master.

I will be taking the exam on 21st of March
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so
that I would like to have two weeks
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before
the exam to prepare and I will
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return back
on Sunday morning after the exam. According to our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
policy, I
am entitled
to take two weeks
consecutively
to
be deducted
from annual
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
balance.

Therefore
, I will delegate my colleague David Peter to act as my backup during my absence
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
he has been working with me since I have commenced my job here,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
I will hold a training session for him to undertake my tasks.

In the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
, thank you for your attention to this matter, and I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours
sincerely
,

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Mina
Michael
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
He who knows no foreign languages know nothing of his own.
Johann Wolfgang von Goethe

IELTS letter You work in an international company. You need to take some time off work. Write a letter toyour employer. In your letter: -Explain why you need this time off-give details of when you want the time off-say who can do your work when you are away v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
181 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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