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You are working for a company. You need to take some time off work and want to ask your manager about this. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter-explain why want to take time off work-give details of the amount of time you need-suggest how you wor v.7

You are working for a company. You need to take some time off work and want to ask your manager about this. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter-explain why want to take time off work-give details of the amount of time you need-suggest how you wor v. 7
Dear Manager, I am writing in regards to request of my unpaid leave for next month. My brother is getting married soon and the celebration of marriage will be held on 1st of March 2016, which is next two weeks, at Malaysia. As a part of the family member, participation is required because it is really important to our family. Therefore, I will not be able to come to company as I have to have some gift preparation for my brother and his lovely future wife. I have done most of job tasks for next week before I left Australia. As Katie has the same position as I do in the company, therefore she will be the one who takes over my position while I am away. I will not be coming to company, from Monday 21st to Sunday 27th and will be back on 3rd of March which is Thursday. I would be grateful that if you could allow me this time. This are very important to my family and me. Thank you in advance. Your Sincerely, Edison
Dear Manager,

I am writing
Use "in regard to", "with regard to", or more simply "regarding".
in regards to
request of my unpaid
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
for
next
month.

My brother is getting married
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
and the celebration of marriage will
be held
on 1st of March 2016, which is
next
two weeks, at Malaysia. As a part of the family member, participation
is required
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
it is
really
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
to our family.
Therefore
, I will not be able to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
as I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
gift preparation for my brother and his lovely future wife.

I have done
Consider using "most job" or "most of the job".
most of job
tasks for
next
week
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
Australia. As Katie has the same position as I do in the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
,
therefore
she will be the one who takes over my position while I am away. I will not be coming to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
, from Monday 21st to Sunday 27th and will be back on 3rd of March which is Thursday.

I would be grateful that if you could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
me this time.
The verb 'are' is plural. Did you mean "these are", "This is" or "This was"?
This are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
to my family and me. Thank you in advance.

Did you mean "Yours"? (complimentary close)
Your
Sincerely
,

Edison
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS letter You are working for a company. You need to take some time off work and want to ask your manager about this. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter-explain why want to take time off work-give details of the amount of time you need-suggest how you wor v. 7

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
178 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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