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You work for a company and you need to take some time off work. you want to ask your manager about it. in your letter writeExplain why you want to work to take time off. give details of the amount of time you need. suggest how your work could be covered while v.2

You work for a company and you need to take some time off work. you want to ask your manager about it. in your letter writeExplain why you want to work to take time off. give details of the amount of time you need. suggest how your work could be covered while v. 2
Dear Mr. Boutorabi I am writing this to ask some unpaid leave next month. since I was being nominated for Tehran' s best singer competition, the organizers have planned few days camp to prepare all rivals for a better performance. To take part in this fascinating occasion, I would need to be away for 4 days, from Monday 18th to Thursday 24th. my schedule for that week is approximately light, All I have to do is checking data center servers. Zara would be able to attend these in my place, As she has all experiences in MSCA field and she is hard-working too. I have no other urgent task to do on that time. I' m very grateful if you could allow me this time. this competition is really important to me since I upon being a teenager. It would be my last opportunity to make my wish become true. Sincerely Parmia O
Dear Mr.
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Boutorabi


I am writing this to ask
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some
unpaid
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leave
next
month.

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since
I was
being nominated
for
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Tehran&
#039; s best singer competition, the organizers have planned few days camp to prepare all rivals for a better performance.

To
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take part
in this fascinating occasion, I would need to be away for 4 days, from Monday 18th to Thursday 24th.
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my
schedule for that week is approximately light, All I
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have to
do is checking data center servers. Zara would be able to attend these in my place, As she has all experiences in MSCA
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field and
she is
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hard
-working too. I have no other urgent task to do on that time.

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I&
#039; m
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very
grateful if you could
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allow
me this time.

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this
competition is
really
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important
to me since I upon being a
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teenager
. It would be my last opportunity to
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make
my wish become true.

Sincerely


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Parmia
O
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0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS letter You work for a company and you need to take some time off work. you want to ask your manager about it. in your letter writeExplain why you want to work to take time off. give details of the amount of time you need. suggest how your work could be covered while v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
152 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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