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Write a letter to an english-speaking friend. In your letter. Explain why you changed jobs. . describe your new job. tell him/her your other news. v.3

Write a letter to an english-speaking friend. In your letter. Explain why you changed jobs. . describe your new job. tell him/her your other news. v. 3
Dear Eric, I hope this letter see you well. I am writing to tell you that I just changed my job. You may not believe it that I am working in Sydney, Australia now. I quited my last job in A company on 8 October 2016. The reason that I decided to change my job is the complex interpersonal relationship that I cannot handle in A company. Any way, I am glad I made that decision and managed to find a new job in Sydney. The company I work for is called D& C. I still work in my profession as a civil engineer. My main duty includes supervising construction activities and compiling documents, which is easy for me because I do not need to deal with complicate interpersonal relationship with colleagues any more. I would like to invite you to Sydney for a travel. I live not far from the Bondi Beach. We can swim and enjoy barbeque. I sincerely hope you can come for a visit. I am look forward to a positive reply. Yours friendly, Jim Pan
Dear Eric,

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see
you well. I am writing to
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tell
you that I
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just
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changed
my
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job
. You may not believe it that I am working in Sydney, Australia
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now
. I
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quited
my last
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job
in A
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company
on 8 October 2016. The reason that I decided to
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change
my
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job
is the complex interpersonal relationship that I cannot handle in A
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company
. Any way, I am glad I made that decision and managed to find a new
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job
in Sydney.

The
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company
I work for
is called
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D&amp
; C. I
still
work in my profession as a civil engineer. My main duty includes supervising construction activities and compiling documents, which is easy for me
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because
I do not need to deal with complicate interpersonal relationship with colleagues
Did you mean the adverb "anymore"?
any more
.

I would like to invite you to Sydney for
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a travel
. I
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live
not far from the Bondi Beach. We can swim and enjoy
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barbeque
. I
sincerely
hope you can
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come
for a visit. I am look forward to a
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positive
reply.

Yours friendly,

Jim Pan
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4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS letter Write a letter to an english-speaking friend. In your letter. Explain why you changed jobs. . describe your new job. tell him/her your other news. v. 3

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
179 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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