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you work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letterExplain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six monthsSay how your wo v.8

you work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letterExplain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six monthsSay how your wo v. 8
Dear Jack, I am writing to you about my decision about how I want to work in London which is the company’s head office in for six months. As you know, I am working in Istanbul office for five years, I have some problems with my family and I hope to leave my country, should I transfer to head office I have enough time to take a professional training course in London university and it can have a positive effect on my efficiency. So I request you to kindly permit me to leave the country. If it possible for you tell me to know about how can I request to transfer to head office or tell me about temporary occupation vacancy at the head office. I should inform you, I can handle my work in Istanbul with my laptop and Katy accept to helps my work for six months. Thank you for your time and support, I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, John Smith
Dear Jack,

I am writing to you about my decision about how I want to work in London which is the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
’s head
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
office
in for six months.

As you know, I am working in Istanbul
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
office
for five years, I have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
problems with my family and I hope to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
my country, should I transfer to head
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
office
I have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
time to take a professional training course in London university and it can have a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
effect on my efficiency.

This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
I request you to kindly permit me to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
the country. If
Did you mean "it is"?
it
possible for you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tell
me to know about how can I request to transfer to head
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
office
or
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tell
me about temporary occupation vacancy at the head office.

I should inform you, I can handle my work in Istanbul with my laptop and Katy accept to
The verb after "to" should be in the base form: "help".
helps
my work for six months.

Thank you for your time and support, I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours
faithfully
,

John Smith
0Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS letter you work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letterExplain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six monthsSay how your wo v. 8

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
166 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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