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You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. v.5

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. v. 5
Dear Mr Jacob, I am writing this letter to inform you about my desire to work in our company’s head office in Amsterdam for about six months. Recently, our company has announced an extensive training programme on the techniques of developing new accounting software for mid-size business firms, and I would like to avail this opportunity. Our company now develops such software for only small firms at our local office and soon we will need to target large business entities. The training programme is to be held at our head office from 10th of the next July. I would also like to add here that this particular training programme may prove out to be quite important for a software development team leader like me in showing the way to the junior team members and managing larger projects in the future. I have already talked to my project manager to help my team members carry on their routine works without any hurdle, and he assured me that he would jump in to fill the void within the team in my absence. So, it would be great if you could arrange for my transfer so that I can join the training programme and bring innovations to our team. Yours sincerely, John Andrew
Dear Mr Jacob,

I am writing this letter to inform you about my desire to work in our
company
’s head office in Amsterdam for about six months.

Recently, our
company
has announced an extensive
training
programme
on the techniques of developing new accounting software for mid-size business firms, and I would like to avail this opportunity. Our
company
now
develops such software for
only
small
firms at our local office and
soon
we will need to target large business entities.

The
training
programme
is to
be held
at our head office from 10th of the
next
July. I would
also
like to
add
here that this particular
training
programme
may prove out to be quite
important
for a software development
team
leader like me in showing the way to the junior
team
members and managing larger projects in the future.

I have already talked to my project manager to
help
my
team
members carry on their routine works without any hurdle, and he assured me that he would jump in to fill the void within the
team
in my absence.
So
, it would be great if you could arrange for my transfer
so
that I can
join
the
training
programme
and bring innovations to our team.

Yours
sincerely
,

John Andrew
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS letter You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. v. 5

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
209 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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