Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell how you feel. v. 1

Dear Amy Horner, I am a huge fan of your music and writing to congratulate you for a brilliant performance at the City Emporium yesterday evening which I am sure everyone enjoyed to the fullest. It was simply breathtaking and electrifying to me and my friends who were also present at the concert. I have always dreamt of seeing your performance live and yesterday was one of the best days of my life to have the chance for the first time. I am an aspiring musician and I started playing the electric guitar and drums at a very tender age of 9. I can also play the flute besides composing a few songs for the band I am involved in. In fact, I have been a member of a local music band called "Window of Dreams" for the last six years and we primarily focus on playing pop and rock music. You have always been my idol as a musician and songwriter. I am sure you are terribly busy, but I am really hoping that you would share some tips and provide some mentorship to help me do better in music. I would really appreciate if you can spare some of your precious time to guide me which will eventually be a great help for me to further enhance my skills and boost my confidence. Thank you very much for your contributions to the music world. Yours sincerely, Emily Knight

IELTS letter You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell how you feel. v.1

Dear Amy
Horner
, I am a huge fan of your
music
and writing to congratulate you for a brilliant performance at the City Emporium yesterday evening which I am sure everyone enjoyed to the fullest. It was
simply
breathtaking and electrifying to me and my friends who were
also
present at the concert. I have always dreamt of seeing your performance
live
and yesterday was one of the best days of my life to have the chance for the
first
time. I am an aspiring musician and I
started
playing the electric guitar and drums at a
very
tender age of 9.
I
can
also
play the flute
besides
composing a few songs for the band I
am involved
in. In fact, I have been a member of a local
music
band called
"
Window of Dreams
"
for the last six
years and
we
primarily
focus on playing pop and rock
music
. You have always been my idol as a musician and songwriter. I am sure you are
terribly
busy,
but
I am
really
hoping that you would share
some
tips and provide
some
mentorship to
help
me do better in
music
. I would
really
appreciate if you can spare
some
of your precious time to guide me which will
eventually
be a great
help
for me to
further
enhance my
skills
and boost my confidence. Thank you
very
much for your contributions to the
music
world. Yours
sincerely
, Emily Knight
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
Letter
7 paragraphs
239 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resources: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Band score ≥ 7
  • Band score ≤ 6
Similar letter posts: