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You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell how you feel. v.2

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell how you feel. v. 2
Dear Kim Lee, I have recently attended one of your music concerts and I simply loved it. All of your fellow artists performed really well, but I would like to say that your performance stood out among other performers. I just wanted to let you know that I have never really seen any singer sing at such ease while also playing one of the most difficult guitars called “flamenco”. Besides, I also like that little fuzzy tone in your voice which perfectly blends with your singing style. Finally, I also enjoyed your musical clarity and musical intensity until the end which is not really seen among many rock music artists. Anyway, I like to sing typical rock songs with the help of electric guitars, and I never seem to be able to achieve the desired musical pitch and tempo, which I would like to have in my music. I have even tried bass guitars but I don’t exactly see any visible changes in my musical pitch and tempo. So, if you share some of your valuable experience in using electric and bass guitars while singing soft rock songs, I would highly appreciate it. Yours sincerely, Eric Connolly
Dear Kim Lee,

I have recently attended one of your music concerts and I
simply
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loved
it. All of your fellow artists performed
really
well,
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but
I would like to say that your performance stood out among other performers.

I
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just
wanted to
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let
you know that I have never
really
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
any singer sing at such
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ease
while
also
playing one of the most difficult guitars called “flamenco”.
Besides
, I
also
like that
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little
fuzzy tone in your voice which
perfectly
blends with your singing style.
Finally
, I
also
enjoyed your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
musical
clarity and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
musical
intensity until the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
which is not
really
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
among
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
rock music artists.

Anyway, I like to sing typical rock songs with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
of electric guitars, and I never seem to be able to achieve the desired
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
musical
pitch and tempo, which I would like to have in my music. I have even tried bass guitars
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
I don’t exactly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
any visible
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
in my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
musical
pitch and tempo.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, if you share
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
of your valuable experience in using electric and bass guitars while singing soft rock songs, I would
highly
appreciate it.

Yours
sincerely
,

Eric
Connolly
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS letter You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell how you feel. v. 2

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
196 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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