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You work for an international company. You are celebrating special family event and need to take time off for it. Write a letter to your boss. - Explain what the celebration is- Ask how long you would take time off- Say how your work could be done while yo v.7

You work for an international company. You are celebrating special family event and need to take time off for it. Write a letter to your boss. - Explain what the celebration is- Ask how long you would take time off- Say how your work could be done while yo v. 7
Dear Sir/Madam, I would like to apply for 2 weeks leave in month of June to attend special family event back in India. I understand this is long period off work hence I am applying in advance so my work can be better managed in my absence. My grandparents are celebration their 50th wedding anniversary and we are arranging surprise celebration for them. This is also an opportunity for all family members to get together for spend some time with each other. I would like to apply for at least 2 weeks off so I can help my cousins make arrangement for this occasion and spend some time with my family. I am planning to clear majority of my backlog items before June. Some items may need to be picked up for which I already started involving Beth in these activities, so she can also have enough time understanding what work has been done so far and we have smooth transition of duties. Kindly consider this letter as official leave application. Looking forward to hearing from you soon. Sincerely Gunjan
Dear Sir/Madam,

I would like to apply for 2 weeks
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
in month of June to attend special family
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
event
back in India. I understand this is long period off work
hence
I am applying in advance
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
my work can be better managed in my absence.

My grandparents are celebration their 50th wedding
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
anniversary and
we are arranging surprise celebration for them. This is
also
an opportunity for all family members to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
together for spend
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
time with each other.

I would like to apply for at least 2 weeks off
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
I can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
my cousins
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
arrangement for this occasion and spend
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
time with my family.

I am planning to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
majority of my backlog items
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
June.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
items may need to
be picked
up for which I already
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
involving Beth in these activities,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
she can
also
have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
time understanding what work has
been done
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
far and
we have smooth transition of duties.

Kindly consider this letter as official
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
application. Looking forward to hearing from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Sincerely


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Gunjan
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS letter You work for an international company. You are celebrating special family event and need to take time off for it. Write a letter to your boss. - Explain what the celebration is- Ask how long you would take time off- Say how your work could be done while yo v. 7

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
179 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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