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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You should write at least 150 words. You have just rented an unfurnished flat and a friend has told you that the Opportunity Shop in the shoping centre has cheap second-hand furniture. Write to the shop owner d v.63

You have just rented an unfurnished flat and a friend has told you that the Opportunity Shop in the shoping centre has cheap second-hand furniture. Write to the shop owner d v. 63
Dear Sir, I am writing this letter to enquire about the inexpensive home furniture for my personal use. One of my friends told me about your shop and thereupon I found your address from internet. I recently shifted in flat which is unfurnished so I require almost all items for flat and I have very limited budget to furnish the flat with necessary furniture. The top most items in priority lists are bed not necessary double bed but it should be wooden and dining table of 4 chairs as there is limited space in the dining area. Another item which I would like to buy is shoe stand, though I have no choice of material, it should not be wider than 5 feet in height. I know that you mostly deal in used furniture and availability of items depend on the seller too, thereby, I would like to get information about the availability of these items. In addition to status, it would be mandatory to mention the tentative cost of the items and any extra expenditure such as transportation, assembling etc. I do not mind to pay extra if items match my specification and are in robust conditions. I am planning to buy these items in next week so I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, RAJA
Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to
Possible spelling mistake. 'enquire' is British English.
enquire
about the inexpensive home furniture for my personal
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
. One of my friends
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
told
me about your shop and thereupon I found your address from internet.

I recently shifted in flat which
is unfurnished
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
I require almost all
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
items
for flat and I have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
limited budget to furnish the flat with necessary furniture. The top most
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
items
in priority lists
are bed
not necessary double bed
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
it should be wooden and dining table of 4 chairs as there
is limited
space in the dining area. Another
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
item
which I would like to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
is shoe stand, though I have no choice of material, it should not be wider than
Writing for an international audience? Consider adding the metric equivalent.
5 feet
in height.

I know that you
mostly
deal in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
furniture and availability of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
items
depend on the seller too, thereby, I would like to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
information about the availability of these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
items
.
In addition
to status, it would be mandatory to mention the tentative cost of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
items
and any extra expenditure such as transportation, assembling etc. I do not mind to pay extra if
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
items
match my specification and are in robust conditions.

I am planning to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
items
in
next
week
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
I am looking forward to hearing from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Yours
faithfully
,

RAJA
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS letter You have just rented an unfurnished flat and a friend has told you that the Opportunity Shop in the shoping centre has cheap second-hand furniture. Write to the shop owner d v. 63

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
220 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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