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Question: You ordered an item on a company website, which should have been delivered the next day, but it never turned up. Write a letter to the manager and saywhat was the item. why it was important that you get it immediately. what you suggest the compan v.1

Question: You ordered an item on a company website, which should have been delivered the next day, but it never turned up. Write a letter to the manager and saywhat was the item. why it was important that you get it immediately. what you suggest the compan v. 1
Dear Sir, I am writing to inform you that I ordered the anniversary cake on 12th October 2018 which was supposed to be delivered next day. However, Cake is yet to be delivered. While ordering the cake from website, it was clearly mentioned that within one day, it will be delivered with extra charges of ten dollars. I placed the online order at 10: 00 am one day before my anniversary, considering it will be delivered on next day i. e. 13th October 2018. I wanted to surprise my wife by presenting the cake to her but it all messed up by your unprofessional service. Moreover, I was embarrassed in small party too hosted by my wife where guests were curiously waiting for cake. Since my special day got ruined by your unprofessional delivery, I do not need the cake now. Therefore, I ask for not only the cake price but also the penalty for not honoring the commitment. I request you to take a decision in this regard by next Friday and credit money in my bank account. I am enclosing the receipt for your verification. I look forward to hearing from you. Your sincerely Jumbo
Dear Sir,

I am writing to inform you that I ordered the anniversary
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cake
on 12th October 2018 which
was supposed
to
be delivered
next
day.
However
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Cake
is
yet
to
be delivered
.

While ordering the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cake
from website, it was
clearly
mentioned that within one day, it will
be delivered
with extra charges of ten dollars. I placed the online order at 10: 00 am one day
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
my anniversary, considering it will
be delivered
on
next
day
There should be no space here: "i.e.".
i. e.
13th October 2018. I wanted to surprise my wife by presenting the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cake
to her
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
it all messed up by your unprofessional service.
Moreover
, I
was embarrassed
in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
party too hosted by my wife where guests were
curiously
waiting for cake.

Since my special day
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
ruined by your unprofessional delivery, I do not need the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cake
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
.
Therefore
, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ask for
not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cake
price
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
the penalty for not honoring the commitment. I request you to take a decision in this regard by
next
Friday and credit money in my bank account. I am enclosing the receipt for your verification.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
look forward to hearing from you.

Your
sincerely


Jumbo
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
6Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS letter Question: You ordered an item on a company website, which should have been delivered the next day, but it never turned up. Write a letter to the manager and saywhat was the item. why it was important that you get it immediately. what you suggest the compan v. 1

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
196 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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