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you work at home and you have problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job. write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment. in your letterdescribe the problem with the equipmentexplain how this problem is affecting your w v.1

you work at home and you have problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job. write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment. in your letterdescribe the problem with the equipmentexplain how this problem is affecting your w v. 1

Dear sir, I am writing this letter to lodge a complain about the laptop which I had bought from your shop 6 months back. Since a year I am working in an infrastructure technology based company where most of the time I have to work from distance. This resulted in buying a portable desk with which I can easily communicate with my organisation and work as per my pace. After a sound research I concluded, that apple mackbook Air is all what i need. Since a month I am facing the issue of battery problem. The charging get reduced within a short span of time approximately an hour. Also, the temperature of the laptop increase profusely. As a result, I am not able to work as I require a charging plug everywhere i travel and unable to meet my project submission deadline. I highly appreciate if you could help me resolve the issue as the device is in warrantee period. Furthermore, it is a request to either replace the device or solve the problem on urgent basis, as I have to leave country next month for work tour. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Hima Kacha

Dear sir,

I am writing this letter to lodge a The word 'complain' is a verb. Did you mean the noun "complaint"?complaint
complain
 about the laptop which I had This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :purchased
bought
 from your shop 6 months back.

“Since” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Since
 a year I am working in an infrastructure technology based This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :enterprisecorporation
company
 where most of the time I This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ought to
have to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtaskindustrytrialjobproductionstruggle
work
 from distance. This resulted in buying a portable desk with which I can easily
 communicate with my Possible spelling mistake. 'organisation' is British English.organization
organisation
 and You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtaskindustrytrialjobproductionstruggle
work
 as per my pace.

After a sound research I concluded, that apple Possible spelling mistake found.MacBook
mackbook
 Air is all what Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.I
i
 need. “Since” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Since
 a month I am facing the issue of battery problem. The charging This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :alleviated
reduced
 within a short span of time approximately an hour. Also
, the temperature of the laptop increase profusely
. As a result
, I am not able to You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtaskindustrytrialjobproductionstruggle
work
 as I require a charging plug everywhere Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.I
i
 travel and unable to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :attain
meet
 my project submission deadline.

I highly
 appreciate if you could This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assistassistance
help
 me resolve the issue as the device is in Possible spelling mistake found.warranted
warrantee
 period. Furthermore
, it is a request to either replace the device or solve the problem on urgent basis, as I This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ought to
have to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :depart
leave
 country next
 month for You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtaskindustrytrialjobproductionstruggle
work
 tour.

I am looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully
,

Possible spelling mistake found.HimLimaIMAHIARIMAHims
Hima
Possible spelling mistake found.DachaKeishaSacha
Kacha

4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes

IELTS letter you work at home and you have problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job. write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment. in your letterdescribe the problem with the equipmentexplain how this problem is affecting your w v. 1

Letter

American English

8 paragraphs

199 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 5.5

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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