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Write a letter to an airline manager to find out about something you forgot on the plane during your travel. In your letter– give details about your flight– describe the item you forgot– explain why it is important that you get it back v.2

Write a letter to an airline manager to find out about something you forgot on the plane during your travel. In your letter– give details about your flight– describe the item you forgot– explain why it is important that you get it back v. 2
Dear Sir, I am writing this letter to inform you that I was travelling from New Delhi to Bangalore in flight no. AI320 on March 6th, 2019 and was seated at 32B. I forgot one of my luggage’s which is a Blue colour sky bag and my name is engraved in the black colour, italic format on the top panel of the bag. The bag carries important documents such as my passport and some very important official documents. To elucidate, I was travelling to attend a business conference and I have made all the necessary notes that have been kept in the stated bag. Since I was appointed to attend this seminar with huge responsibility owing to a reason that it can be a huge profitable deal for our company. Requesting your good self to kindly help me in locating the bag as this is a matter of prestige for your airlines as well. However, I have already logged a complaint in your customer care department but I would personally request you to look into the same and revert positively. Yours faithfully, Daniel
Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to inform you that I was travelling from New Delhi to Bangalore in flight no. AI320 on March 6th, 2019 and
was seated
at 32B. I forgot one of my luggage’s which is a Blue
Possible spelling mistake. 'colour' is British English.
colour
sky
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bag
and my name
is engraved
in the black
Possible spelling mistake. 'colour' is British English.
colour
, italic format on the top panel of the bag.

The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bag
carries
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
documents such as my passport and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
official documents. To elucidate, I was travelling to attend a business conference and I have made all the necessary notes that have been
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
kept
in the stated
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bag
. Since I
was appointed
to attend this seminar with huge responsibility owing to a reason that it can be a huge profitable deal for our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
.

Requesting your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
self to kindly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me in locating the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bag
as this is a matter of prestige for your airlines
as well
.
However
, I have already logged a complaint in your customer care department
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
I would
personally
request you to look into the same and revert
positively
.

Yours
faithfully
,

Daniel
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS letter Write a letter to an airline manager to find out about something you forgot on the plane during your travel. In your letter– give details about your flight– describe the item you forgot– explain why it is important that you get it back v. 2

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
182 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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