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A holiday competition – invitation letterYou won a competition and received a vacation for two as a prize. Write a letter to ask them to go on holiday with you. In the letter, you should: •tell him/her about the competition you won, •state what kind o v.2

A holiday competition – invitation letterYou won a competition and received a vacation for two as a prize. Write a letter to ask them to go on holiday with you. In the letter, you should: •tell him/her about the competition you won, •state what kind o v. 2
Dear John, I hope you are very well! I won the Nation writing prize! You do not know how joyful I am but I want to say with you help I am able to achieve this unbelievable target. Many thanks! The other thing I am so glad is the prize offer me a vacation which is 5 days Singapore tour, which I would like to invite you come with me together, not only because you help me a lot but also you are my best and lifetime friend. The tour include returen flight tickets, accomodations and local guide tour service, which we pack our belongings and some clothes is enough. We can go to the night zoo, famous port and enjoy local delicious food. I am so excited. I hope the vacation can be thank you gift and the joy moment I like share it with you. Hope you have chance come it with me. Kind regards, Joe
Dear John,

I hope you are
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very
well!

I won the Nation writing prize! You do not know how joyful I am
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but
I want to say with you
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help
I am able to achieve this unbelievable target.
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Many
thanks!

The other thing I am
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so
glad is the prize offer me a vacation which is 5 days Singapore tour, which I would like to invite you
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come
with me together, not
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only
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because
you
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help
me a lot
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but
also
you are my best and lifetime friend.

The tour include
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returen
flight tickets,
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accomodations
and local guide tour service, which we pack our belongings and
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some
clothes is
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enough
. We can go to the night zoo,
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famous
port and enjoy local delicious food. I am
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so
excited.

I hope the vacation can be
Consider using the past participle "thanked"?
thank
you gift and the joy moment I like share it with you.

Hope you have chance
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
it with me.

Kind regards,

Joe
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS letter A holiday competition – invitation letterYou won a competition and received a vacation for two as a prize. Write a letter to ask them to go on holiday with you. In the letter, you should: •tell him/her about the competition you won, •state what kind o v. 2

Letter
  American English
9 paragraphs
157 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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