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A holiday competition – invitation letterYou won a competition and received a vacation for two as a prize. Write a letter to ask them to go on holiday with you. In the letter, you should: •tell him/her about the competition you won, •state what kind o v.2

A holiday competition – invitation letterYou won a competition and received a vacation for two as a prize. Write a letter to ask them to go on holiday with you. In the letter, you should: •tell him/her about the competition you won, •state what kind o v. 2

Dear John, I hope you are very well! I won the Nation writing prize! You do not know how joyful I am but I want to say with you help I am able to achieve this unbelievable target. Many thanks! The other thing I am so glad is the prize offer me a vacation which is 5 days Singapore tour, which I would like to invite you come with me together, not only because you help me a lot but also you are my best and lifetime friend. The tour include returen flight tickets, accomodations and local guide tour service, which we pack our belongings and some clothes is enough. We can go to the night zoo, famous port and enjoy local delicious food. I am so excited. I hope the vacation can be thank you gift and the joy moment I like share it with you. Hope you have chance come it with me. Kind regards, Joe

Dear John,

I hope you are This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:extremelyimmenselysupremelysuperb
very
 well!

I won the Nation writing prize! You do not know how joyful I am This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 I want to say with you This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assistassistance
help
 I am able to achieve this unbelievable target. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
Many
 thanks!

The other thing I am This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 glad is the prize offer me a vacation which is 5 days Singapore tour, which I would like to invite you This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :approacharrive
come
 with me together, not This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 you This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assistassistance
help
 me a lot This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
also
 you are my best and lifetime friend.

The tour include Possible spelling mistake found.return
returen
 flight tickets, Possible spelling mistake found.accommodations
accomodations
 and local guide tour service, which we pack our belongings and This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 clothes is This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:abundance
enough
. We can go to the night zoo, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:well-known
famous
 port and enjoy local delicious food. I am This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 excited.

I hope the vacation can be Consider using the past participle "thanked"?thanked
thank
 you gift and the joy moment I like share it with you.

Hope you have chance This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :approacharrive
come
 it with me.

Kind regards,

Joe

2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS letter A holiday competition – invitation letterYou won a competition and received a vacation for two as a prize. Write a letter to ask them to go on holiday with you. In the letter, you should: •tell him/her about the competition you won, •state what kind o v. 2

Letter

American English

9 paragraphs

157 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.0

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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