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you have recently booked a Trip to Africa Write a letter to the travel agency and ask for the membership in their club In your letter explain in more details who are you what information you exactly need why when and in what form you need it the informati v.1

you have recently booked a Trip to Africa Write a letter to the travel agency and ask for the membership in their club In your letter explain in more details who are you what information you exactly need why when and in what form you need it the informati v. 1
Dear Sir or Madam, I am John, dweller of Huston Street U. S. A, penning down this epistle to get acquaint with itinerary of a trip to Africa that I have booked with your travel company. Although I have read your information about the this trip on your advertisement brochure, I want to acquire the comprehensive knowledge about this tour. Firstly, I need the name and contact numbers of all those voyagers who would travel with me. I also excited to inquire about the hotel which you have booked for us, whether it is a half board or full board and list of place for excursions. It would be high appreciable if you apprise me with the list of local doctors available so that I could contact them in case of emergency. kindly send me above the inquired details through email at least one week before the flight along with my original GST invoice and acknowledgement of payments. Please feel free to contact regarding any problem and i have enclosed my email address. I am anticipating a prompt response from your side. Yours sincerely, JOhn
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am John, dweller of Huston Street U. S. A, penning down this epistle to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
acquaint with itinerary of a trip to Africa that I have booked with your travel
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
.

Although I have read your information about
Maybe you need to remove the second determiner so that only "the" or "this" is left.
the this
trip on your advertisement brochure, I want to acquire the comprehensive knowledge about this tour.
Firstly
, I need the name and contact numbers of all those voyagers who would travel with me. I
also
excited to inquire about the hotel which you have booked for us, whether it is a half board or full board and list of place for excursions. It would be high appreciable if you apprise me with the list of local doctors available
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that I could contact them in case of emergency.

This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
kindly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
me above the inquired
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
through email at least one week
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
the flight along with my original GST invoice and
Possible spelling mistake. 'acknowledgement' is British English.
acknowledgement
of payments.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
feel free to contact regarding any problem and
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
have enclosed my email address.

I am anticipating a prompt response from your side.

Yours
sincerely
,

Possible spelling mistake found.
JOhn
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS letter you have recently booked a Trip to Africa Write a letter to the travel agency and ask for the membership in their club In your letter explain in more details who are you what information you exactly need why when and in what form you need it the informati v. 1

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
184 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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