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You have just received a credit card statement from your bank. The statement lists a number of expensive purchases that you are sure you did not make. Write a letter to the bank manager. In the letter: • Introduce yourself. • Explain that you did not bu v.2

You have just received a credit card statement from your bank. The statement lists a number of expensive purchases that you are sure you did not make. Write a letter to the bank manager. In the letter: • Introduce yourself. • Explain that you did not bu v. 2
Dear Sir, I am a decorous account holder of your bank- HDFC and the details are - Account Number- ABCD) Branch Name: Huda City Center, Gurgaon. I am writing this letter to inform you about some fishy transactions done through my account. To elucidate, I have recently got my credit card bill summary for this month and I am sure that neither my wife nor I have done these transactions. All the items like jewellery worth Rs 200, 000, designer clothes and other knick – knacks listed in the summary that I have not bought. Additionally, whenever I made any transaction, I do get a call from the bank whether this transaction should be allowed or not. However, this time I have not received any calls. I would request the bank to look after into this matter as I am a salaried class person and cannot afford such a high-end shopping that too all in a single go. Also, please reverse all the transactions and in the mean time, I will file a complaint against the matter so that the culprit can be put behind bars. Looking forward to hear from you soon. Yours faithfully, Ben
Dear Sir,

I am a decorous account holder of your bank- HDFC and the
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details
are
Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.
-
Account Number
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- ABCD
Unpaired symbol: '(' seems to be missing
)
Branch Name:
Possible spelling mistake found.
Huda
City Center, Gurgaon. I am writing this letter to inform you about
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
fishy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transactions
done through my account.

To elucidate, I have recently
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
my credit card bill summary for this
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
month and
I am sure that neither my wife nor I have done these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transactions
. All the items like
Possible spelling mistake. 'jewellery' is British English.
jewellery
worth Rs 200, 000, designer clothes and other
A dash was used instead of a hyphen. Did you mean: "knick-knacks".
knick – knacks
listed in the summary that I have not
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bought
.
Additionally
, whenever I made any
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transaction
, I do
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get
a call from the bank whether this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transaction
should be
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allowed
or not.
However
, this time I have not received any calls.

I would request the bank to look after into this matter as I am a salaried
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
person and cannot afford such a high-
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end
shopping that
Did you mean "to all"?
too all
in a single go.
Also
,
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please
reverse all the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transactions
and in the
Did you mean "meantime" (=the period of time between two things)?
mean time
, I will file a complaint against the matter
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that the culprit can
be put
behind bars.

Looking forward
In the grammatical structure 'look + forward + to + verb', the verb 'to' is used with the gerund: "to hearing".
to hear
from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Yours
faithfully
,

Ben
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes
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IELTS letter You have just received a credit card statement from your bank. The statement lists a number of expensive purchases that you are sure you did not make. Write a letter to the bank manager. In the letter: • Introduce yourself. • Explain that you did not bu v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
195 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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