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You have to submit the project for your university and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for thisWrite a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment in your letter v.2

You have to submit the project for your university and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for thisWrite a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment in your letter v. 2
Dear Sir With reference to the receipts number 4657AGH-GTT67 dated 24-Sep-2019 for the purchase of Canon Printer DeskJet 2452, I would like to complain about the performance of this equipment. First of all, it was not easy to configure the printer with my system. As soon as I did, it’s not working properly. The Printer’s response is quite slow. And if prints come after few minutes, colors are faded which is so annoying. Since I bought the printer specifically for my upcoming project at the university, it’s causing a delay in my project. I have to print multiple print-outs on daily basis in order to discuss with my class fellows. It happened several times that I didn’t reach the institute on time just because I was stuck with the printer. As I can see on the printer manual, it should print at least 20 print outs in a minute. This means 3 seconds for a print. But right it takes more than a minute to reach the signal to the printer. If this situation remains the same it would ruin my whole project. Therefore, I request you to please change the printer at all. Because I think it would take a lot of time to repair the printer and now I just have only 2 days left to finalize my project. If that is not possible then please send the concerned person at my location to repair or configure the printer properly. May I have not configured it correctly? That would quite helpful for me. I will really appreciate. Regards,
Dear Sir

With reference to the receipts number 4657AGH-GTT67 dated 24-Sep-2019 for the
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purchase
of Canon Printer
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DeskJet
2452, I would like to complain about the performance of this equipment.
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First of all
, it was not easy to configure the printer with my system. As
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soon
as I did, it’s not working
properly
. The Printer’s response is quite slow. And if
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prints
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come
after few minutes, colors
are faded
which is
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so
annoying.

Since I
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bought
the printer
specifically
for my upcoming project at the university, it’s causing a delay in my project. I
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have to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
print
multiple print-outs on daily basis in order to discuss with my
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class
fellows. It happened several times that I didn’t reach the institute on time
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just
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because
I
was stuck
with the printer. As I can
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see
on the printer manual, it should
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
print
at least 20
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print
outs in a minute. This means 3 seconds for a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
print
.
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But
right it takes more than a minute to reach the signal to the printer.
“If” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
If
this situation remains the same it would ruin my whole project.

Therefore
, I request you to
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please
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change
the printer at all.
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Because
I
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think
it would take
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a lot of
time to repair the printer and
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now
I
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just
have
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only
2 days
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left
to finalize my project. If
that is
not possible then
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please
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send
the concerned person at my location to repair or configure the printer
properly
. May I have not configured it
correctly
? That
It seems that a verb or adverb has been misspelled or is missing here.
would quite helpful
for me.

I will
really
appreciate.

Regards,
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS letter You have to submit the project for your university and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for thisWrite a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment in your letter v. 2

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
260 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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