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work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job. Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment. In your letterdescribe the problem with the equipmentexplain how this problem is affecting your worksay v.2

work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job. Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment. In your letterdescribe the problem with the equipmentexplain how this problem is affecting your worksay v. 2
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter to complain about the headset I purchased last week. I have been an exultant member of your shop for 5 years. However, the product that I bought disappointed me. I would like you to replace it as it is hampering my office work. As you know, I prefer to work from home because I need to give maximum hours of call support in day to ensure the smooth process of logistics. On the first place, when I plugged into my laptop it created a creepy noise and stopped however after an hour it restarted due to which I was unable to listen to the clients clearly. In addition, I am communicating temporarily on emails to respond to my customer' s queries but not all of them. These problems exacerbating my business relationship with some of the eminent user. Would it be possible to send an agent from your shop for replacement? My headset model is Philips 678HG and black color. I hope an auxiliary piece should be available, if not please send me the list of the stocked headset. I am attaching the bill and checked it is under warranty for 6 months replacement. Please send me a new headset as soon as possible. I am waiting to hearing from you soon. Your' s Faithfully, Apoorva Chikara
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to complain about the
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headset
I
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purchased
last week. I have been an exultant member of your shop for 5 years.
However
, the product that I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bought
disappointed me. I would like you to replace it as it is hampering my office work.

As you know, I prefer to work from home
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because
I need to give maximum hours of call support in day to ensure the smooth process of logistics. On the
first
place, when I plugged into my laptop it created a creepy noise and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stopped
however
after an hour it restarted due to which I was unable to listen to the clients
clearly
.
In addition
, I am communicating
temporarily
on emails to respond to my
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customer&
#039; s queries
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but
not all of them. These problems exacerbating my business relationship with
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some of the
eminent user.

Would it be possible to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
an agent from your shop for replacement? My
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
headset
model is Philips 678HG and black color. I hope an auxiliary piece should be available, if not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
me the list of the stocked
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
headset
. I am attaching the bill and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
checked
it is under warranty for 6 months replacement.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
me a new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
headset
as
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soon
as possible.

I am waiting to hearing from you
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soon
.

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Your&
#039; s
Faithfully
,

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Apoorva
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Chikara
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
One should not aim at being possible to understand but at being impossible to misunderstand.
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IELTS letter work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job. Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment. In your letterdescribe the problem with the equipmentexplain how this problem is affecting your worksay v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
225 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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