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You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job. v.1

You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job. v. 1
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to complain about a Wireless Router that I bought from your store a few months ago. Unfortunately, it has suddenly stopped working and I am unable to connect to the Internet and work from home. I am hoping you would replace it immediately. The Netgear - AC1750 Dual-Band Wi-Fi Router that I purchased from you was operational until the end of last week but it is not working at the moment. I cannot find out the exact reason for it not to function but I have tried to do some initial diagnostics without any luck. I tried a similar router that I borrowed from a friend and it worked as expected. I work from home as a freelancer and my work depends on an uninterrupted Internet connection. I have several ongoing projects and I must meet the deadlines to retain my client base. As you can see, I am totally dependent on this equipment to get connected to the Internet, so I need to get this router fixed immediately. I suggest that you either replace the device with a new one or repair it within the next two days. Thank you for giving the matter your attention and I hope to hear your reply soon. Yours faithfully, Denis Brian
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to complain about a Wireless Router that I
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bought
from your store a few months ago. Unfortunately, it has
suddenly
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stopped
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working and
I am unable to connect to the Internet and work from home. I am hoping you would replace it immediately.

The Netgear
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-
AC1750 Dual-Band Wi-Fi Router that I
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purchased
from you was operational until the
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end
of last week
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but
it is not working at the moment. I cannot find out the exact reason for it not to function
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but
I have tried to do
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some
initial diagnostics without any luck. I tried a similar router that I borrowed from a friend and it worked as
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expected
.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
work from home as a freelancer and my work depends on an uninterrupted Internet connection.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
have several ongoing projects and I
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must
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meet
the deadlines to retain my client base. As you can
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see
, I am
totally
dependent on this equipment to
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get
connected to the Internet,
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so
I need to
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get
this router
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fixed
immediately. I suggest that you either replace the device with a new one or repair it within the
next
two days.

Thank you for giving the matter your attention and I hope to hear your reply
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soon
.

Yours
faithfully
,

Denis Brian
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS letter You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job. v. 1

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
215 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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