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You recently attended a meeting at a hotel. When you returned home, you found you had left some important papers at the hotel. v.3

You recently attended a meeting at a hotel. When you returned home, you found you had left some important papers at the hotel. v. 3
Dear Sir or Madam, I have recently attended a business conference at your hotel 'Rosewood London', and regrettably misplaced some important documents in the room I stayed in. I am hoping you would be kind enough to notify me once you have those documents. I stayed in your hotel from 24th to 25th October in room 524. And I attended a conference at the Business Meeting Hall on 24th October. I departed the next day and just after I reached Manchester, I noticed that I have left those documents unattended in my hotel room, perhaps inside the drawer that was placed beside my bed. All of those documents are placed inside a blue folder with my name ‘Mike Buchanan’ written on top of it. In particular, these documents are extremely important to me. They contain some confidential financial information about my company, a presentation and some notes that I took during the conference. Without those documents, I would be in great trouble. I need to submit a few of these papers to my company before the end of this month. I would request you to ask your staff to conduct a thorough search in the room and then hold this folder in your possession. Please give me a call at 0161-508745124578 once you have it. I will arrange someone to collect it for me or perhaps fly to London to receive it personally. Thank you in advance for your kind help. Yours faithfully, Mike Buchanan
Dear Sir or Madam,

I have recently attended a business conference at your hotel 'Rosewood London', and
regrettably
misplaced
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
documents
in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
I stayed in. I am hoping you would be kind
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
to notify me once you have those documents.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
stayed in your hotel from 24th to 25th October in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
524. And I attended a conference at the Business Meeting Hall on 24th October. I departed the
next
day and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
after I reached Manchester, I noticed that I have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
those
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
documents
unattended in my hotel
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
, perhaps inside the drawer that
was placed
beside my bed. All of those
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
documents
are placed
inside a blue folder with my name ‘Mike Buchanan’ written on top of it.

In particular
, these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
documents
are
extremely
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
to me. They contain
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
confidential financial information about my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
, a presentation and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
notes that I took during the conference. Without those
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
documents
, I would be in great trouble. I need to submit a few of these papers to my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
of this month.

I would request you to ask your staff to conduct a thorough search in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
and then hold this folder in your possession.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
give me a call at 0161-508745124578 once you have it. I will arrange someone to collect it for me or perhaps
fly
to London to receive it
personally
.

Thank you in advance for your kind
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
.

Yours
faithfully
,

Mike Buchanan
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
If we spoke a different language, we would perceive a somewhat different world.
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IELTS letter You recently attended a meeting at a hotel. When you returned home, you found you had left some important papers at the hotel. v. 3

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
244 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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