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You wish to enrol in a course at an Australian college. You have already written a letter to the college asking for information but you have not received the reply yet. Write a letter to the college explaining your concern because the course will start in v.2

You wish to enrol in a course at an Australian college. You have already written a letter to the college asking for information but you have not received the reply yet. Write a letter to the college explaining your concern because the course will start in v. 2
Dear Sir I am writing this letter to seek the details about the enrolment procedure of the course named Applied Data Science for Python provided by your college. Last month, I had sent a missive to your department to gather the information regarding the admission process of the above mentioned course but I did not get any response. As the programme is starting within two months and it is being too late that I have not yet enrolled. The reason for being late is that I did not get answer for my queries from you. That is why, I am again writing this epistle. I want to know whether the seats are available so that I can fill the admission form for being a part of this course. If, it is possible that still I have time to participate in the course then could you please provide me further information. I would like to know for how long this course would continue? And what would be the cost to complete this programme? Whether, I will get accommodation in the college hostel as I am new to Sydney and unaware of the surrounding. I would be pleased if you respond back to me as soon as possible as you know, I do not have enough time. Yours sincerely Malisa Thompson
Dear Sir

I am writing this letter to seek the
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details
about the
Possible spelling mistake. 'enrolment' is British English.
enrolment
procedure of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
named Applied Data Science for Python provided by your college. Last month, I had
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sent
a missive to your department to gather the information regarding the admission process of the above mentioned
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
I did not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
any response.

As the
Possible spelling mistake. 'programme' is British English.
programme
is starting within two months and it is being too late that I have not
yet
enrolled. The reason for being late is that I did not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
answer for my queries from you.
That is
why, I am again writing this epistle. I want to know whether the seats are available
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that I can fill the admission form for being a part of this course.

If, it is possible that
still
I have time to participate in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
then could you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
provide me
further
information. I would like to know for how long this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
would continue? And what would be the cost to complete this
Possible spelling mistake. 'programme' is British English.
programme
? Whether, I will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
accommodation in the college hostel as I am new to Sydney and unaware of the surrounding.

I would be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
pleased
if you respond back to me as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
as possible as you know, I do not have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
time.

Yours
sincerely


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Malisa
Thompson
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4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS letter You wish to enrol in a course at an Australian college. You have already written a letter to the college asking for information but you have not received the reply yet. Write a letter to the college explaining your concern because the course will start in v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
218 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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