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Letter of Advice - IELTS Writing Task - I, General TestA friend has written to you asking for advice about a problem at work. You have had a similar problem in the past. Write a reply to your friend. In your letter: tell your friend you understand the pro v.1

Letter of Advice - IELTS Writing Task - I, General TestA friend has written to you asking for advice about a problem at work. You have had a similar problem in the past. Write a reply to your friend. In your letter: tell your friend you understand the pro v. 1
Dear R, I fully appreciate the challenges of working in a corporate world. Unfortunately, hard work and discipline do not always help to get a promotion. Instead, one should be really smart in building and expanding internal and external networks. Few years ago, I had the same issue with self-promotion and visibility. In other words, irrespective of the hard labour and efforts to meet work deadline, my contributions remained unnoticed. On the contrary, colleagues and employees who were more vocal, visible and well-connected scored excellent performance ratings and received the laurels. Clearly, I had to change my behaviour and working style in order to promote my contributions in the firm. I had a few coaching sessions with senior leadership team member who shared some tips to succeed in workplace. A couple of months later, my natural modesty were replaced by assertive and confident behaviour. So, let me give you some advice. First of all, you should not shy away from sending an email to your supervisor and leadership team stating your achievements in a particular task or project. Secondly, it is likely that people notice you easily when you start writing articles in internal and external journals. Finally, I would suggest you not to miss any opportunity to make presentations at town-hall and meetings. I hope you will find these suggestions helpful and wish all the very best in your life. Regards, A
Dear R,

I
fully
appreciate the challenges of working in a corporate world. Unfortunately,
hard
work and discipline do not always
help
to
get
a promotion.
Instead
, one should be
really
smart in building and expanding internal and external networks.

Few years ago, I had the same issue with self-promotion and visibility.
In other words
, irrespective of the
hard
labour
and efforts to
meet
work deadline, my contributions remained unnoticed.
On the contrary
, colleagues and employees who were more vocal, visible and well-connected scored excellent performance ratings and received the laurels.
Clearly
, I had to
change
my
behaviour
and working style in order to promote my contributions in the firm. I had a few coaching sessions with senior leadership team member who shared
some
tips to succeed in workplace. A couple of months later, my natural modesty
were replaced
by assertive and confident
behaviour
.

So
,
let
me give you
some
advice.

First of all
, you should not shy away from sending an email to your supervisor and leadership team stating your achievements in a particular task or project.
Secondly
, it is likely that
people
notice you
easily
when you
start
writing articles in internal and external journals.
Finally
, I would suggest you not to miss any opportunity to
make
presentations at town-hall and meetings.

I hope you will find these suggestions helpful and wish all the
very
best in your life.

Regards,

A
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
If you talk to a man in a language he understands, that goes to his head. If you talk to him in his own language, that goes to his heart.
Nelson Mandela

IELTS letter Letter of Advice - IELTS Writing Task - I, General TestA friend has written to you asking for advice about a problem at work. You have had a similar problem in the past. Write a reply to your friend. In your letter: tell your friend you understand the pro v. 1

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
232 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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