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You wish to apply for a position with a company in your city. Write a letter to the manager of this company and include the following information: – your educational background – your work experience – other information that makes you an v.1

You wish to apply for a position with a company in your city. Write a letter to the manager of this company and include the following information: – your educational background – your work experience – other information that makes you an v. 1

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to express my interest for the job opportunity in your organization. I am a Bachelors in Finance and an MBA in Human Resource from Middlesex University. I came across your job advertisement for the vacancy of Senior Human Resource Manager in the classified section of Gulf news. With regards to my professional experience, I have overall five years of full time work experience as a Human Resource Manager in a renowned Oil & Gas company. Apart from handling HR, I also have worked as an Administration Manager as well as served as a Secretary to the CEO. Since, my forte is in talent acquisition, employee verification and payrolls, my candidature will be an ultimate match to your requirement. Also, I would like to highlight my multi-tasking skills, proactive behaviour, accuracy in work and my hardworking attitude towards work. I am keen to join your organization. Looking forward to your positive response. Yours faithfully, Jessica Ayri

Dear Sir/Madam,

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a Bachelors
 in Finance and an MBA in Human Resource from Middlesex University. Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
 came across your job advertisement for the vacancy of Senior Human Resource Manager in the classified section of Gulf news.

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 have worked as an Administration Manager as well
 as served as a Secretary to the CEO.

Since, my forte is in talent acquisition, employee verification and payrolls, my candidature will be an ultimate match to your requirement. Also
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skills
, proactive Possible spelling mistake. 'behaviour' is British English.behavior
behaviour
, accuracy in work and my hardworking attitude towards work.

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join
 your organization. Looking forward to your This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:beneficial
positive
 response.

Yours faithfully
,

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Ayri

4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS letter You wish to apply for a position with a company in your city. Write a letter to the manager of this company and include the following information: – your educational background – your work experience – other information that makes you an v. 1

Letter

American English

7 paragraphs

159 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 5.5

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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