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After working in your department for over 3 years, you feel the need to switch your department. Write a letter to your boss requesting a change in the department. In the letter mention: • Why do you want to switch departments? • Which department would y v.2

After working in your department for over 3 years, you feel the need to switch your department. Write a letter to your boss requesting a change in the department. In the letter mention: • Why do you want to switch departments? • Which department would y v. 2
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing in regards to my keen interest for different department within the organization. At the moment, my association with the finance department has been for more than 3 years. However, recently I completed my Post Graduation in Human Resource Management and I assume it will be a right time to alter my role and responsibility. Undoubtedly, I will be interested to join the human resource team for the upcoming years of my service. Also, I will be always available to extend a hand to those who seek my advice in the finance team. My current qualification has added a value to my skills which I would like to further use it for the advancement of our organization. Furthermore, my forte is into talent acquisition as well as payroll. Hence, my acquired knowledge will make me a better fit for human resource department. I hope you grant to permission for this internal transfer. I will look forward to seeing your positive response. Yours faithfully, Jessica Ayri
Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing
in regards to
my keen interest for
different
department within the organization.

At the moment, my association with the finance department has been for more than 3 years.
However
, recently I completed my Post Graduation in Human Resource Management and I assume it will be a right time to alter my role and responsibility.

Undoubtedly
, I will
be interested
to
join
the human resource team for the upcoming years of my service.
Also
, I will be always available to extend a hand to those who seek my advice in the finance team.

My
current
qualification has
added
a value to my
skills
which I would like to
further
use
it for the advancement of our organization.
Furthermore
, my forte is into talent acquisition
as well
as payroll.
Hence
, my acquired knowledge will
make
me a better fit for human resource department.

I hope you grant to permission for this internal transfer. I will look forward to seeing your
positive
response.

Yours
faithfully
,

Jessica
Ayri
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS letter After working in your department for over 3 years, you feel the need to switch your department. Write a letter to your boss requesting a change in the department. In the letter mention: • Why do you want to switch departments? • Which department would y v. 2

Letter
8 paragraphs
168 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resources: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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