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WRITING TASK 1You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You are applying for a job and need a letter of reference from someone who knew you when you were at school. Write a letter to one of your old teachers asking for a reference. In your letter: *s v.5

WRITING TASK 1 You are applying for a job and need a letter of reference from someone who knew you when you were at school. Write a letter to one of your old teachers asking for a reference. In your letter: *s v. 5
Dear Peter, I hope this letter finds you well. I am applying for a new job and would like to ask you to provide a reference letter to support my application. This is a project manager role which will focus on improving the interface between HR business partners and HR service desks. The project manager will lead the group of subject matter experts from different areas of HR. This will be a short term international assignment in London. I am excited about this role as it affords a wonderful opportunity to put research findings on change management in practice. This project will set a base for future changes in the way HR function operates in the company. I think I will get a valuable experience from this opportunity. It would be great if you could mention the research projects I have done and the experience I have had in change management and in HR operating models in the reference letter. I appreciate your support. Regards, Aida
Dear Peter,

I hope this letter finds you well.

I am applying for a new job and would like to ask you to provide a reference letter to support my application. This is a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
project
manager role which will focus on improving the interface between HR business partners and HR service desks. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
project
manager will lead the group of
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "subject".
subject matter
experts from
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different
areas of HR. This will be a short term international assignment in London.

I
am excited
about this role as it affords a wonderful opportunity to put research findings on
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
management in practice. This
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
project
will set a base for future
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
in the way HR function operates in the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
I will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
a valuable experience from this opportunity.

It would be great if you could mention the research
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
projects
I have done and the experience I have had in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
management and in HR operating models in the reference letter.

I appreciate your support.

Regards, Aida
0Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS letter WRITING TASK 1 You are applying for a job and need a letter of reference from someone who knew you when you were at school. Write a letter to one of your old teachers asking for a reference. In your letter: *s v. 5

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
165 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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