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You wish to apply for a new college course, but you are unsure about the details of cost, durationand subjects posted on the college website. Write an email to the relevant person in admissions atthe college, asking them to clarify these points for youIn v.2

You wish to apply for a new college course, but you are unsure about the details of cost, durationand subjects posted on the college website. Write an email to the relevant person in admissions atthe college, asking them to clarify these points for youIn v. 2
Dear Mr Smith, I’m interested in the photography course this year, and I have seen your name on the college website as the contact for admission queries. I have several questions for you, and I hope you can help. Firstly, regarding the cost of the course, is the fee of $99 per month or for the whole course? Is it possible to pay in monthly instalments, or is the fee paid in full up front? The website says that ‘other payment methods are possible, ’ but there is no explanation. Secondly, can you tell me what the exact dates of the course are? Your website says ‘Summer to Autumn, ’ but I cannot see any specific dates relating to this. I would be grateful for the precise dates, including when I need to pay for the course and buy the books and so on. Finally, I’d appreciate some information about the course content itself, including details of the equipment to be used and the wording of the certificate I will receive at the end. The website says that I should contact you for this. Thank you for your help, and I look forward to receiving the information requested. Kind Regards, Chris Bell
Dear Mr Smith,

I’m interested in the photography
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course
this year, and I have
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seen
your name on the college
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website
as the contact for admission queries. I have several questions for you, and I hope you can
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help
.

Firstly
, regarding the cost of the
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course
, is the fee of $99 per month or for the whole
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course
? Is it possible to pay in monthly
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instalments
, or is the fee paid in full up front? The
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website
says that ‘other payment methods are possible,
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’
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but
there is no explanation.
Secondly
, can you
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tell
me what the exact dates of the
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course
are? Your
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website
says ‘Summer to Autumn,
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’
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but
I cannot
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see
any specific dates relating to this.

I would be grateful for the precise dates, including when I need to pay for the
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course
and
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buy
the books and
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so
on.
Finally
, I’d appreciate
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some
information about the
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course
content itself, including
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details
of the equipment to be
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used
and the wording of the certificate I will receive at the
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end
. The
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website
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says


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that
I should contact you for this.

Thank you for your
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help
, and I look forward to receiving the information requested.

Kind Regards,

Chris Bell
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS letter You wish to apply for a new college course, but you are unsure about the details of cost, durationand subjects posted on the college website. Write an email to the relevant person in admissions atthe college, asking them to clarify these points for youIn v. 2

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  American English
8 paragraphs
201 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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