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You were hurt in a minor accident in a supermarket, and you wish to complain to the supermarket, Write a letter to the manager of the supermarket. In your letter- Say who you are- Give details about the accident- Suggest how the supermarket could prevent s v.2

You were hurt in a minor accident in a supermarket, and you wish to complain to the supermarket, Write a letter to the manager of the supermarket. In your letter- Say who you are- Give details about the accident- Suggest how the supermarket could prevent s v. 2
Dear Manager, I am writing this letter to register a complaint about a minor accident that I had in Jinnah supermarket yesterday evening while I was walking in the market with my friends. I am Ali Jawad, residing in Islamabad for years and I come to Jinnah market every now and then. Hence, I am a regular visitor to the market for more than 3 years. If you remember, we even met twice earlier in the market when I gave some suggestions to improve the environment of it. Anyway, about the incident, I tripped on a pothole while I was walking in the market yesterday evening. To be more precise about the details, it was dark and there were no street lights on the road passing through the market; hence, I could not see the pothole on the road. As such, I stumbled, lost my footing and fell on the road; however, I did not sustain any major injury, thankfully. Later, I was taken to the hospital by the passers-by to get minor medical care. To avoid such incidents in the future, I suggest you to fill the pots on all roads in the market and install street lights so that people can see clearly while walking on the roads. Please let me know if any kind of my support is needed in this regard. I hope the required action will be taken as soon as possible to eliminate the imminent danger of such incidents. Yours faithfully, Ali Jawad
Dear Manager,

I am writing this letter to register a complaint about a minor accident that I had in Jinnah supermarket yesterday evening while I was walking in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
market
with my friends.

I am Ali
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Jawad
, residing in Islamabad for years and I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
to Jinnah
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market
every
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
and then.
Hence
, I am a regular visitor to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
market
for more than 3 years. If you remember, we even met twice earlier in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
market
when I gave
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
suggestions to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
the environment of it.

Anyway, about the incident, I tripped on a pothole while I was walking in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
market
yesterday evening. To be more precise about the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
, it was dark and there were no street lights on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
road
passing through the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
market
;
hence
, I could not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
the pothole on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
road
. As such, I stumbled, lost my footing and fell on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
road
;
however
, I did not sustain any major injury,
thankfully
. Later, I
was taken
to the hospital by the passers-by to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
minor medical care.

To avoid such incidents in the future, I suggest you to fill the pots on all
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
roads
in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
market
and install street lights
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
clearly
while walking on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
roads
.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
me know if any kind of my support
is needed
in this regard.

I hope the required action will
be taken
as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
as possible to eliminate the imminent
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
danger
of such incidents.

Yours
faithfully
,

Ali
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Jawad
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS letter You were hurt in a minor accident in a supermarket, and you wish to complain to the supermarket, Write a letter to the manager of the supermarket. In your letter- Say who you are- Give details about the accident- Suggest how the supermarket could prevent s v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
248 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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