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Write a letter to the company which is looking for help to renovate school buildings Why do you want to help What could you do When could you start You should write at least 150 words v.1

Write a letter to the company which is looking for help to renovate school buildings Why do you want to help What could you do When could you start v. 1
I am writing this letter about the advertisement posted in the Times of India on 1st February 2020. I would like to offer my help in renovating school buildings. In a small firm, I work as an architect. Mostly, in the evenings I am free and so I can use my time in doing some voluntary job. I recently worked on a century-old house in the old city of Ahmedabad. I wish to use my experience in giving a modern touch to the worn-out school buildings. Recently, I am working on a new project which is a bit time-consuming and keeps me occupied until the end of this week. Thus, I can join you next week. I will be able to help with interiors and managing account books. I hope it will be a great experience to work with you and do some good for our city. I have attached my résumé with this letter. Thanking you. Yours sincerely, Tasneem
I am writing this letter about the advertisement posted in
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the Times of India
on 1st February 2020. I would like to offer my
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help
in renovating school buildings.

In a
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small
firm, I work as an architect.
Mostly
, in the evenings I am
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
free and
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so
I can
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use
my time in doing
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some
voluntary job.

I recently worked on a century-
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old
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
in the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
city of Ahmedabad. I wish to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
my experience in giving a modern touch to the worn-out school buildings.

Recently, I am working on a new project which is a bit time-consuming and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keeps
me occupied until the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
of this week.
Thus
, I can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
you
next
week. I will be able to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
with interiors and managing account books.

I hope it will be a great experience to work with you and do
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
for our city.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
have attached my résumé with this letter.

Thanking you.

Yours
sincerely
,

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Tasneem
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS letter Write a letter to the company which is looking for help to renovate school buildings Why do you want to help What could you do When could you start v. 1

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
159 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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