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you want to learn a course related to your work. Write a letter to your employer aboutWhat the course is? How it will benefit to the company? v.2

you want to learn a course related to your work. Write a letter to your employer aboutWhat the course is? How it will benefit to the company? v. 2
Dear sir I am writing this letter to inform you about a cookery course that I want to join. I am working in your company as an assistant chef. Yesterday I read an advertisement from a daily newspaper about cooking classes which are offered by a renowned college with little money and the duration of the lesson is only 6 months. Timing of the classes is flexible so it will not affect my work schedule. In this course, they provide information about various recipes and hybrid dishes. I want to enrol in the classes because of it not only boost my skills but also aid the company to add more types of cuisines. They give up to date formulae and also provide a certificate to the learners, so we can add more dishes to our menu. I also told my other colleagues to join this course so our company will get skilful workers and become prominent among others. Hope you will accept my idea. yours faithfully Emily
Dear sir

I am writing this letter to inform you about a cookery course that I want to
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join
. I am working in your
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company
as an assistant chef. Yesterday I read an advertisement from a daily newspaper about cooking classes which
are offered
by a renowned college with
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little
money and the duration of the lesson is
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only
6 months. Timing of the classes is flexible
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so
it will not affect my work schedule. In this course, they provide information about various recipes and hybrid dishes.

I want to enrol in the classes
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because
of it not
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only
boost my
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skills
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but
also
aid the
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company
to
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add
more types of cuisines. They give up to date formulae and
also
provide a certificate to the learners,
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so
we can
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add
more dishes to our menu. I
also
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told
my other colleagues to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
this course
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so
our
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company
will
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get
Possible spelling mistake. 'skilful' is British English.
skilful
workers and become prominent among others.

Hope you will accept my
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idea
.

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yours
faithfully


Emily
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS letter you want to learn a course related to your work. Write a letter to your employer aboutWhat the course is? How it will benefit to the company? v. 2

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
166 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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