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You have just moved to a new apartment. Write a letter to your friend inviting them to come to your new home. In the letter you should: • explain why you moved • describe your new home • tell them how to get to your apartment v.2

You have just moved to a new apartment. Write a letter to your friend inviting them to come to your new home. In the letter you should: • explain why you moved • describe your new home • tell them how to get to your apartment v. 2
Dear Annie I’m just writing to to let you know that you are invited to my new house warming party next Friday. I recently moved to North Shore apartment in Sunny Valley. My old apartment landlord decided to sell it so I wasn’t able to live there any more. He gave me three weeks notice to move out and I started to look for a new place straight away. It was really hard to find a new place but finally I found something which is suitable for me. It’s a new apartment building in a really nice area. It have a two floors, first floor have master bedroom and upstairs it’s a large lounge with kitchen. House complex also have it’s own gym and a swimming pool. You can find this building easily as it’s only apartment block in the area. I live in a fifth floor and my apartment in on the left side. You can park on street or catch a bus as a bus stop is just 5 minutes away. Looking forward to seeing you. All the best Lisa
Dear Annie

I’m
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just
writing
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to to
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let
you know that you
are invited
to my
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new
This expression is normally spelled as one or with hyphen.
house warming
party
next
Friday.

I recently
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moved
to North Shore
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apartment
in Sunny Valley. My
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old
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apartment
landlord decided to sell it
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so
I wasn’t able to
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live
there
Did you mean the adverb "anymore"?
any more
. He gave me three weeks notice to
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move
out and I
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started
to look for a
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new
place straight away. It was
really
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hard
to find a
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new
place
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but
finally
I found something which is suitable for me.

It’s a
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new
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apartment
building in a
really
nice area.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
It
Did you mean "has"?
have
a two floors,
first
floor have master bedroom and upstairs it’s a large lounge with kitchen.
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House
complex
also
have
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it’s
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own
gym and a swimming pool.

You can find this building
easily
as it’s
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only
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apartment
block in the area. I
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live
in a fifth floor and my
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apartment
in on the
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left
side. You can park on street or catch a bus as a bus
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stop
is
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just
5 minutes away.

Looking forward to seeing you.

All the best

Lisa
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS letter You have just moved to a new apartment. Write a letter to your friend inviting them to come to your new home. In the letter you should: • explain why you moved • describe your new home • tell them how to get to your apartment v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
181 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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