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Letter to the airline manager stating problem you had with the staffWrite flight details Explain the problemsWhat you want manager to do v.1

Letter to the airline manager stating problem you had with the staffWrite flight details Explain the problemsWhat you want manager to do v. 1
Dear Sir II am writing this letter to express my utter annoyance with staff of fly Jet Airways. I I was travelling to Manali from Amritsar flight number MH1685 and my seat number 12C. The flight time was 10: 30 AM from the airport. The facilities provided in aeroplane Was fine but I did not like the behaviour of some staff members. After 20 minutes of flight I called us to your word to get food and I told him to bring vegetarian food only. Halfway through my meal, I bit into what turned out to be a chicken bone the presence of bone was totally jarring as i am vegetarian. I showed this to one of the staff members but he just ignored my complaint and showed reckless behaviour, which was totally ridiculous act of them. I am completely disappointed with the service of your employees. I believe that you would refund my half ticket price and take strict action against team members for their unprofessional behaviour. I can be reached by phone at (444). Hope you will take action very soon to avoid any further inconvenience. Yours faithfully Emily
Dear Sir

II
Did you mean "am I"?
am
writing this letter to express my utter annoyance with staff of
fly
Jet Airways.
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I I
was travelling to
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Manali
from Amritsar flight number MH1685 and my seat number 12C. The flight time was 10: 30 AM from the airport. The facilities provided in
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aeroplane
Was fine
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but
I did not like the
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behaviour
of
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some
staff members.

After 20 minutes of flight I called us to your word to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
food and I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
told
him to bring vegetarian food
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
. Halfway through my meal, I bit into what turned out to be a chicken bone the presence of bone was
totally
jarring as
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
am vegetarian. I
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showed
this to one of the staff members
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but
he
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just
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ignored
my complaint and
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showed
reckless
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behaviour
, which was
totally
ridiculous act of them. I am completely disappointed with the service of your employees.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
believe that you would refund my half ticket price and take strict action against team members for their unprofessional
Possible spelling mistake. 'behaviour' is British English.
behaviour
.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
can
be reached
by phone at (444). Hope you will take action
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
to avoid any
further
inconvenience.

Yours
faithfully


Emily
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes
To have another language is to possess a second soul.
Charlemagne

IELTS letter Letter to the airline manager stating problem you had with the staffWrite flight details Explain the problemsWhat you want manager to do v. 1

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
190 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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