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On a recent holiday you lost a valuable item. You have travel insurance to cover the cost anything lost. Write a letter to the manager of the insurance company. In the letter you should: • describe the item that you lost • explain how you lost it v.11

On a recent holiday you lost a valuable item. You have travel insurance to cover the cost anything lost. Write a letter to the manager of the insurance company. In the letter you should: • describe the item that you lost • explain how you lost it v. 11
Dear Sir/Madam I would like to make a claim for losing my cellphone and get it refunded by insurance company. Me and my partner was travelling in Bali for a vacation and I lost my iphone 7. It is not a new model but is really important to me because it have all my travel pictures there and I use it for communications. Stayed in Ubud but we wanted to see waterfalls so we took a bus to travel in the jungle. After we started to travel back I notice that my phone wasn’t in my pocket anymore. We were looking around but did not find it anywhere. Then I realized that it might fall out of my pocket when we were crossing a river as it was the most difficult part in our path way back. As I have insurance which is covered for cases like this I would like to make a claim. Unfortunately it can’t be replaced anymore and there is no need to replace it to a new one as it is old model then I think it would be the best to get it refunded for me. Looking forward hearing back to you soon. Kind regards Jenna Smith
Dear Sir/Madam

I would like to
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make
a claim for losing my cellphone and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
it refunded by insurance
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company
.

When referring to yourself and somebody else, put their name first. Also check whether the nominative form "I" is required here.
Me
and my partner was travelling in Bali for a vacation and I lost my
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iphone
7. It is not a new model
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but
is
really
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important
to me
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because
it
Did you mean "has"?
have
all my travel pictures there and I
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use
it for communications.

Stayed in Ubud
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but
we wanted to
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see
waterfalls
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so
we took a bus to travel in the jungle.
“After” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
After
we
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started
to travel back I notice that my phone wasn’t in my pocket anymore. We were looking around
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but
did not find it anywhere. Then I realized that it might fall out of my pocket when we were crossing a river as it was the most difficult part in our path way back.

As I have insurance which
is covered
for cases like this I would like to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a claim. Unfortunately it can’t
be replaced
anymore and there is no need to replace it to a new one as it is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
model then I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
it would be the best to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
it refunded for me.

Looking forward hearing back to you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Kind regards

Jenna Smith
0Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS letter On a recent holiday you lost a valuable item. You have travel insurance to cover the cost anything lost. Write a letter to the manager of the insurance company. In the letter you should: • describe the item that you lost • explain how you lost it v. 11

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
202 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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