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You want to apply for the following job. Write a letter to the supervisior of department, describing your previous experience and explaining why you would be suitable for the job. v.2

You want to apply for the following job. Write a letter to the supervisior of department, describing your previous experience and explaining why you would be suitable for the job. v. 2
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction about my kitchen robot that I purchased in your center store last Saturday and with your poor customer service I received when I called your company to discuss the problem. The main problem with the robot is that its knives do not spin and work properly, when I turn the device on the blades start to turning itself round and then they suddenly stop spinning. . Luckily, I noticed that fault after short time, I called the your shop requesting fast action to be taken, however, the person who answered the phone replied that there was nothing he could do to resolve this problem. I would appreciate it if you could replace my robot for a new one of the same brand and features. I will kept the receipt my purchase for your replacement. Please contact me and inforn me know how you insist to resolve this problem. Your Faithfully. Steven
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to express my dissatisfaction about my kitchen robot that I
purchased
in your center store last Saturday and with your poor customer service I received when I called your
company
to discuss the problem.

The main problem with the robot is that its knives do not spin and work
properly
, when I turn the device on the blades
start
to turning itself
round and
then they
suddenly
stop
spinning.
.


Luckily, I noticed that fault after short time, I called
the your shop
requesting
fast
action to
be taken
,
however
, the person who answered the phone replied that there was nothing he could do to resolve this problem.

I would appreciate it if you could replace my robot for a new one of the same brand and features. I will
kept
the receipt my
purchase
for your replacement.

Please
contact me and
inforn
me know how you
insist to resolve
this problem.

Your
Faithfully
.

Steven
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS letter You want to apply for the following job. Write a letter to the supervisior of department, describing your previous experience and explaining why you would be suitable for the job. v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
161 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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