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You want to apply for the following job. Write a letter to the supervisior of department, describing your previous experience and explaining why you would be suitable for the job. v.2

You want to apply for the following job. Write a letter to the supervisior of department, describing your previous experience and explaining why you would be suitable for the job. v. 2

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction about my kitchen robot that I purchased in your center store last Saturday and with your poor customer service I received when I called your company to discuss the problem. The main problem with the robot is that its knives do not spin and work properly, when I turn the device on the blades start to turning itself round and then they suddenly stop spinning. . Luckily, I noticed that fault after short time, I called the your shop requesting fast action to be taken, however, the person who answered the phone replied that there was nothing he could do to resolve this problem. I would appreciate it if you could replace my robot for a new one of the same brand and features. I will kept the receipt my purchase for your replacement. Please contact me and inforn me know how you insist to resolve this problem. Your Faithfully. Steven

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to express my dissatisfaction about my kitchen robot that I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquired
purchased
 in your center store last Saturday and with your poor customer service I received when I called your This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :enterprisecorporation
company
 to discuss the problem.

The main problem with the robot is that its knives do not spin and work properly
, when I turn the device on the blades This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiate
start
 to turning itself Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).round, and
round and
 then they suddenly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :terminateceasediscontinue
stop
 spinning. Don't put a space before the full stop.
.


Luckily, I noticed that fault after short time, I called A determiner cannot combine with a possessive pronoun. Did you mean simply "your shop" or "the shop"?your shopthe shop
the your shop
 requesting This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:quickrapidswiftprompt
fast
 action to be taken
, however
, the person who answered the phone replied that there was nothing he could do to resolve this problem.

I would appreciate it if you could replace my robot for a new one of the same brand and features. I will The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: "keep"keep
kept
 the receipt my This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
purchase
 for your replacement.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :satisfy
Please
 contact me and Possible spelling mistake found.informinborn
inforn
 me know how you The usual collocation for "insist" is "on" not "to". Did you mean "insist on resolving"?insist on resolving
insist to resolve
 this problem.

Your Faithfully
.

Steven

1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS letter You want to apply for the following job. Write a letter to the supervisior of department, describing your previous experience and explaining why you would be suitable for the job. v. 2

Letter

American English

8 paragraphs

161 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.0

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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