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you are going on vacation and need someone to look after your apartment while you are on vacationWrite a letter to your friend, where are the key, ask him to take care of your apartment, what to expect on the day of your arrival. v.2

you are going on vacation and need someone to look after your apartment while you are on vacationWrite a letter to your friend, where are the key, ask him to take care of your apartment, what to expect on the day of your arrival. v. 2
Dear James, Hope this letter find you in radiant health and bests spirit. I am writing to you to look after my house during my visit to the Paris from 20th of October until 1st of December. Primarily, if you can aid me in supervising my place for a couple of days. Besides this, I have put the key in the letter box. Moreover, |I have done proper cleanliness last week, if you can just vacuüm and change garbage bins every Sunday. Also, not to forget to pay my utility bills in the last of the month. Likely, I have kept the bills in front drawer of my bedroom. Additionally, I have stored vegetables and fruits in the refrigerators. At a certain time, if you need to buy anything i kept my gift card on the study desk to use it. Lastly, I would be delighted to meet you after my journey and will buy a souvenir for you definitely as a first priority. Likely, I will share my experience and photos with a cup of tea at café. Enjoy the place and do write to me or email me at frequent times in touch with each other. Best regards, Sam.
Dear James,

Hope this letter find you in radiant health and bests spirit. I am writing to you to look after my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
during my visit to the Paris from 20th of October until 1st of December.

Primarily
, if you can aid me in supervising my place for a couple of days.
Besides
this, I have put the key in the letter box.
Moreover
, |I have done proper cleanliness last week, if you can
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
Possible spelling mistake found.
vacuüm
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
garbage bins every Sunday.
Also
, not to forget to pay my utility bills in the last of the month. Likely, I have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
kept
the bills in front drawer of my bedroom.

Additionally
, I have stored vegetables and fruits in the refrigerators. At a certain time, if you need to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
anything
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
kept
my gift card on the study desk to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
it.

Lastly
, I would
be delighted
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
you after my journey and will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
a souvenir for you definitely as a
first
priority. Likely, I will share my experience and photos with a cup of tea at café.

Enjoy the place and do write to me or email me at frequent times in touch with each other.

Best regards,

Sam.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS letter you are going on vacation and need someone to look after your apartment while you are on vacationWrite a letter to your friend, where are the key, ask him to take care of your apartment, what to expect on the day of your arrival. v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
201 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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