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You took a two days course Write a feedback to course organizer In your letter you should tell what details of the course are what you like what you want to them to do to make it better v.2

You took a two days course Write a feedback to course organizer In your letter you should tell what details of the course are what you like what you want to them to do to make it better v. 2
Dear Sir or Madam, I am Yasmeen Kaur. I have recently taken a course of personality development from your Skill training centre on 28 and 29 August for a duration of 5 hours. Let me elaborate on this. Initially, the whole course was divided into two parts: speaking and body language. On the first day, the host has made us familiar with how to speak precisely and briefly in front of the people. Besides this, in another section, the main attendant had provided us worksheets to write a report on ethics and etiquettes. It was the most intriguing part of the event as we were recognized with how to behave and speak efficiently with a congenial mannerism. Secondly, on another day we were taught how to make the exact posture of the body in front of the third person. Moreover, the lessons of standing erectly, sitting postures as well as shaking habits with abilities to confidence, well-mannered, perfect dressing and so on were quite impressive too. Lastly, the visual presentation on the overall development of body and language was resourceful and made me learn a lot of things. At the end of the day, my weekend course was meaningful. Furthermore, I have learnt numerous ideas and ways through which I can interact with my co-workers and influence my friends. Needless to say, everything was on the top notch except the sitting facility. In other words, there only chairs to seat with no side table. As a result, it was quite hard to write any notes or writing. I have seen some of the participants were managed to write by putting the paper on a thigh of the leg while sitting on the chair. I would appreciate if you could better think of your sitting arrangements for the attendants when they want to do the writing. I hope you will address these concerns until the next event. Yours sincerely, jasmin kaur
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am
Yasmeen
Kaur
. I have recently taken a course of personality development from your
Skill
training
centre
on 28 and 29 August for a duration of 5 hours.
Let
me elaborate on this.

Initially
, the whole course
was divided
into two parts: speaking and body language. On the
first
day, the host has made us familiar with how to speak
precisely
and
briefly
in front of the
people
.
Besides
this, in another section, the main attendant
had


provided
us worksheets to write a report on ethics and
etiquettes
. It was the most intriguing part of the
event
as we
were recognized
with how to behave and speak
efficiently
with a congenial mannerism.

Secondly
, on another day we
were taught
how to
make
the exact posture of the body in front of the third person.
Moreover
, the lessons of standing
erectly
,
sitting
postures
as well
as shaking habits with abilities to confidence, well-mannered, perfect dressing and
so
on were quite impressive too.
Lastly
, the visual presentation on the
overall
development of body and language was resourceful and made me learn
a lot of
things.

At the
end
of the day, my weekend course was meaningful.
Furthermore
, I have
learnt
numerous
ideas
and ways through which I can interact with my co-workers and influence my friends. Needless to say, everything was on the
top notch
except the
sitting
facility.
In other words
, there
only
chairs to seat with no side table.
As a result
, it was quite
hard
to write any notes or writing. I have
seen
some of the
participants
were managed
to write by putting the paper on a thigh of the leg while
sitting
on the chair. I would appreciate if you could better
think
of your
sitting
arrangements for the attendants when they want to do the writing.

I
hope you will address these concerns until the
next
event
.

Yours
sincerely
,

jasmin
kaur
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12Mistakes

IELTS letter You took a two days course Write a feedback to course organizer In your letter you should tell what details of the course are what you like what you want to them to do to make it better v. 2

Letter
  American English
9 paragraphs
319 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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