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You are unable to attend a goodbye party of a colleague at work. Write to him/her and say, – Why can’t you come? – Give him/her your best wishes. – Suggest another time and place for you to meet. v.2

You are unable to attend a goodbye party of a colleague at work. Write to him/her and say, – Why can’t you come? – Give him/her your best wishes. – Suggest another time and place for you to meet. v. 2
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of my absence in your farewell party held
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couple of
weeks ago.
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Let
me the elaborate the situation in detail.

Elucidating in detail, I am
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so
sorry for not to be a part of your special occasion.
Firstly
, I
was prepared
in advance to
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make
you astonished by throwing a surprise party on your last day. Even
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some of the
plans
as well
as celebrations I have made
personally
from my side.
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But
, the day when I was getting ready to
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come
to the party unfortunately, I fall from the ladders and
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got
fractured.
Besides
, there was no one at home.
Simultaneously
, I
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barely
stand or reach up to my phone.
Unluckily
, that was
terribly
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a
worst day of my life. Meanwhile, the housekeeper
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came and
he took me to hospital.

Wishing you all the best for your future.
Also
,
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don&
#039; t worry, I am sure you will do well.
Moreover
,
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don&
#039; t feel isolated in the new environment you are a dynamic personality who can adjust
specifically
.

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end
, as
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soon
as I will
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get
well, We both will
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get
together in our favorite cuisine near to the ferry. Till then have a deliberate
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blessings
from my side to you for your blossom future.

Yours
faithfully
,

Ravi.
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0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
16Mistakes
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IELTS letter You are unable to attend a goodbye party of a colleague at work. Write to him/her and say, – Why can’t you come? – Give him/her your best wishes. – Suggest another time and place for you to meet. v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
236 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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