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You have seen an advertisement for a part-time job at a restaurant and want to apply for it. Write a letter to the manager. In your letter: describe your experience. tell him why you are interested in the job. say why you think you would be suitable for the v.2

You have seen an advertisement for a part-time job at a restaurant and want to apply for it. Write a letter to the manager. In your letter: describe your experience. tell him why you are interested in the job. say why you think you would be suitable for the v. 2
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter to apply for a part-time job at your restaurant for the role of assistant manager. I came to know that your restaurant needs an assistant manager for evening hours through an advert published in employment newsweekly. My name is Ell Green and I am pursuing masters in business administration at the University of Texas, which is one of the top universities of the world. In addition to this, I also hold a one-year diploma certificate in hotel management. I am allowed for 20 hours of part-time work per week during my study and It would be a wonderful opportunity for me to work for you and gain real work experience. Moreover, your restaurant is in the vicinity of my campus and It would be convenient for me to work in late evening hours. As you are looking for sincere candidates, I assure you that I would work diligently and would stand by your expectations by providing excellent service. Please find enclosed my CV and I would be happy to provide references from my college professor and members of the community. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Ell Green
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to apply for a part-time job at your restaurant for the role of assistant manager. I came to know that your restaurant needs an assistant manager for evening hours through an advert published in employment
newsweekly
.

My name is Ell
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
Green and
I am pursuing masters in business administration at the University of Texas, which is one of the top universities of the world.
In addition
to this, I
also
hold a one-year diploma certificate in hotel management.

I am
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
allowed
for 20 hours of part-time
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
per week during my study and It would be a wonderful opportunity for me to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
for you and gain real
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
experience.
Moreover
, your restaurant is in the vicinity of my campus and It would be convenient for me to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
in late evening hours.

As you are looking for sincere candidates, I assure you that I would
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
diligently
and would stand by your expectations by providing excellent service.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
find enclosed my CV and I would be happy to provide references from my college professor and members of the community.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours
faithfully
,

Ell Green
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS letter You have seen an advertisement for a part-time job at a restaurant and want to apply for it. Write a letter to the manager. In your letter: describe your experience. tell him why you are interested in the job. say why you think you would be suitable for the v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
199 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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