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You travelled by a bus company and your suitcase got damaged. write a letter to the manager of bus company. In your letter: 1. Give details of your journey2. What and when your suitcase was damaged3. ask the company to pay for your suitcase v.2

You travelled by a bus company and your suitcase got damaged. write a letter to the manager of bus company. In your letter: 1. Give details of your journey2. What and when your suitcase was damaged3. ask the company to pay for your suitcase v. 2
Dear sir, I am writing to complain about the damage caused to my new suitcase while traveling by bus of your company. I boarded the Delhi-Lucknow volvo bus on 22nd december. Bus started from Delhi at 9 PM and I reached Lucknow by next day at 11 AM. Since my suitcase was heavy, I but that into the luggage compartment of the bus. But after reaching my destination, I checked that there were a lot of scratches on my suitcase and its handle was also broken. When I complained to the bus conductor, he said that it is not our responsibility to handle the luggage. While booking a ticket online, it was clearly mentioned on your website that your company takes care of the luggage safety. And also my suitcase weighed below 30kg as per your company' s policy. Therefore, i expect that your company should pay for my suitcase. I am attaching the photographs of my suitcase along with the copy of its bill. Looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully ABC
Dear sir,

I am writing to complain about the damage caused to my new
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suitcase
while traveling by bus of your
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company
.

I boarded the Delhi-Lucknow
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volvo
bus on 22nd
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december
. Bus
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started
from Delhi at 9 PM and I reached Lucknow by
next
day at 11 AM.

Since my
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suitcase
was heavy, I
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but
that into the luggage compartment of the bus.
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But
after reaching my destination, I
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checked
that there were
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a lot of
scratches on my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
suitcase
and its handle was
also
broken. When I complained to the bus conductor, he said that it is not our responsibility to handle the luggage.

While booking a ticket online, it was
clearly
mentioned on your website that your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
takes care of the luggage safety. And
also
my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
suitcase
weighed below
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30kg
as per your
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company&
#039; s policy.
Therefore
,
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i
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expect
that your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
should pay for my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
suitcase
. I am attaching the photographs of my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
suitcase
along with the copy of its bill.

Looking forward to hearing from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Yours
faithfully


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6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
6Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS letter You travelled by a bus company and your suitcase got damaged. write a letter to the manager of bus company. In your letter: 1. Give details of your journey2. What and when your suitcase was damaged3. ask the company to pay for your suitcase v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
174 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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