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You travel by bus every weekday morning, and you always use the same bus route. Recently the bus has not been reliable. It sometimes comes late and for the last few mornings it has not stopped when you hailed it. No change of schedule has been advertised. v.2

You travel by bus every weekday morning, and you always use the same bus route. Recently the bus has not been reliable. It sometimes comes late and for the last few mornings it has not stopped when you hailed it. No change of schedule has been advertised. v. 2
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to inform you that I am a regular commuter of the bus route from “Westland to Parklane” for the last one year. Recently, I have noticed a few problems with the bus service, and the travelers are being affected because of these. Let me explain to you that from the last week, the morning bus didn’t show up on time at the designated station. As a result, I arrived late at the office and this problem is becoming persistent. Furthermore, yesterday the bus didn’t stop at its usual station despite my repeated signals and I was constrained to take a taxi to get to my destination. What surprises me even further that there is no change of bus schedule announced either on your website or on the bus station. In addition to this, the cleanliness situation is deteriorated as compared to past. Perhaps, the drive is not taking the bus to the service station and driving on the route without getting it serviced. The dirty condition of the floor and seats make the passengers uncomfortable which might be bad for the reputation of your company. I would request you to kindly direct your services staff to ensure strict adherence to the timing and also ensure clean/service the buses before driving on the route. Thank you for your consideration Yours faithfully,
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to inform you that I am a regular commuter of the bus route from “
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Westland
to
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Parklane
” for the last one year. Recently, I have noticed a few problems with the bus service, and the travelers are being
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affected
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because
of these.

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Let
me
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explain
to you that from the last week, the morning bus didn’t
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
up on time at the designated station.
As a result
, I arrived late at the office and this problem is becoming persistent.
Furthermore
, yesterday the bus didn’t
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
at its usual station despite my repeated
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signals and
I
was constrained
to take a taxi to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
to my destination. What surprises me even
further
that there is no
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
of bus schedule announced either on your website or on the bus station.

In addition
to this, the cleanliness situation
is deteriorated
as compared to past. Perhaps, the drive is not taking the bus to the service station and driving on the route without getting it serviced. The dirty condition of the floor and seats
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the passengers uncomfortable which might be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
for the reputation of your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
.

I would request you to kindly direct your services staff to ensure strict adherence to the timing and
also
ensure clean/service the buses
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
driving on the route.

Thank you for your consideration

Yours
faithfully
,
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS letter You travel by bus every weekday morning, and you always use the same bus route. Recently the bus has not been reliable. It sometimes comes late and for the last few mornings it has not stopped when you hailed it. No change of schedule has been advertised. v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
227 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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