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You are due to star a new job next week but you will not be able to because you have some problem. Write a letter to your new employer. - explain your situation. - describe your problems. - tell him/ her when you think can start the job. v.2

You are due to star a new job next week but you will not be able to because you have some problem. Write a letter to your new employer. - explain your situation. - describe your problems. - tell him/ her when you think can start the job. v. 2
Dear sir, Greetings of the day. I am glad that I have been selected to serve the organization as a result of our fruitful interaction during the interview. However, I am writing this letter to explain my helplessness for not joining the job as per stipulated date mentioned in the offer letter which falls on 17th sept 2016. I was suffering from the fever and stomach-ache since last few days so have been advised for the blood report by my physician. Today, when I received my blood report with the diagnoses of typhoid. Based on the blood report, I have been guided to hospitalised right away that didn' t allow me a time to meet you in person and to explain about the circumstances. As per the doctor' s opinion, my disease will be cured in a span of 15 days which seems that I will be able to join my duties by 1st october 2016 instead of 17th Sept 2016. I would request you to extend my date of joining on the ground of health reason. Here, enclosed are the reports of diagnosis along with the medical certificate by the doctor for your kind perusal. I regret for the inconvenience may caused due to the delay in my joining and requesting you for your kind cooperation. Yours Faithfully Bhumika suryavanshi
Dear sir,

Greetings of the day. I am glad that I have
been selected
to serve the organization
as a result
of our fruitful interaction during the interview.
However
, I am writing this letter to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
my helplessness for not joining the job as per stipulated date mentioned in the offer letter which falls on 17th
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sept
2016.

I was suffering from the fever and stomach-ache since last few days
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so
have
been advised
for the blood
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report
by my physician.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Today
, when I received my blood
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
report
with the diagnoses of typhoid. Based on the blood
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report
, I have
been guided
to
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hospitalised
right away that
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didn&
#039; t
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
me a time to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
you in person and to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
about the circumstances.

As per the
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doctor&
#039; s opinion, my disease will
be cured
in a span of 15 days which seems that I will be able to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
my duties by 1st
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october
2016
instead
of 17th Sept 2016. I would request you to extend my date of joining on the ground of health reason. Here, enclosed are the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
reports
of diagnosis along with the medical certificate by the doctor for your kind perusal.

I regret for the inconvenience may caused due to the delay in my joining and requesting you for your kind cooperation.

Yours
Faithfully


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Bhumika
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suryavanshi
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS letter You are due to star a new job next week but you will not be able to because you have some problem. Write a letter to your new employer. - explain your situation. - describe your problems. - tell him/ her when you think can start the job. v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
220 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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