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There have been some problems with the bus service especially its reliability in your area over the last two weeks Write a letter to the manager of the bus company In your letter describe what the problems are explain how these problems are affecting you v.2

There have been some problems with the bus service especially its reliability in your area over the last two weeks Write a letter to the manager of the bus company In your letter describe what the problems are explain how these problems are affecting you v. 2
Dear Sir, I intend to write this letter to grab your attention to an important issue. I am using your bus service for more than 5 years. It' s very unfortunate to say that the quality of the bus services is not consistent anymore. There are certain issues being faced by frequent bus travelers. First of all, your bus drivers are not at all punctual; most of the times, the bus driver skips my area route altogether. Another important issue that requires your immediate review is that the ticket collectors sometimes charge more than regular fare without any rational justification. I have to reach office every morning at sharp 9: 00 am and travel time from my home to the office is approximately 20 minutes. I often get late from office as the bus does not come in time on my route. The day bus drivers do not come at all, I have to hire the cab to go to the office; which obviously costs me way more than bus fare. I would like you to review routes distribution and make sure that all buses stop at their designated points to avoid any unnecessary fatigue for commuters. Furthermore, please assign a quality controller on all the bus drivers to ensure timely arrival of buses and also approved collection of fares. I hope to see your positive and swift response against my complaints. Yours Sincerely, Sam
Dear Sir,

I intend to write this letter to grab your attention to an
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important
issue. I am using your bus service for more than 5 years.
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very
unfortunate to say that the quality of the bus services is not consistent anymore. There are certain issues
being faced
by frequent bus travelers.
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First of all
, your bus
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drivers
are not at all punctual;
Consider using "most of the time" if you mean "usually" or "very often".
most of the times
, the bus
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driver
skips my area route altogether. Another
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
issue that requires your immediate review is that the ticket collectors
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sometimes
charge more than regular fare without any rational justification.

I
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have to
reach
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office
every morning at sharp 9: 00 am and travel time from my home to the
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office
is approximately 20 minutes. I
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often
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get
late from
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office
as the bus does not
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come
in time on my route. The day bus
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drivers
do not
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come
at all, I
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have to
hire the cab to go to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
office
; which
obviously
costs me way more than bus fare.

I would like you to review routes distribution and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
sure that all buses
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
at their designated points to avoid any unnecessary fatigue for commuters.
Furthermore
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
assign a quality controller on all the bus
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
drivers
to ensure timely arrival of buses and
also
approved collection of fares. I hope to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
your
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
and swift response against my complaints.

Yours
Sincerely
,

Sam
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS letter There have been some problems with the bus service especially its reliability in your area over the last two weeks Write a letter to the manager of the bus company In your letter describe what the problems are explain how these problems are affecting you v. 2

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
234 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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