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You took your family to a nearby restaurant. You were disappointed with the meal and wish to complain to the manager. v.6

You took your family to a nearby restaurant. You were disappointed with the meal and wish to complain to the manager. v. 6
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to raise my concern about the meal we had at your restaurant last week. I visited your eatery last Sunday to enjoy dinner with my family. I heard about your restaurant on the radio and thought to give it a try. But the meal experience was disappointing. When we entered your restaurant, we saw a special menu written on a board and one of the items was fried rice with fish curry. We decided to try it, which we later regretted deeply. When we were served the dish, we found chilli powder on the surface of the fish. After we inquired about it, one of your attendants told that they keep it off one hour after marinating with chilli powder with some other ingredients. Even though we felt terrible about it, we continued our meal. The dish tasted mediocre, not up to our expectation at all. Unfortunately, my son started feeling bad after we reached home and he disgorged twice. I had a high expectation from your restaurant but got equally frustrated. I would really appreciate if you could take proper action about this inconvenience that we had due to the food we ate at your restaurant. Please instruct your chefs to follow proper hygienic manner and if they do not know how to prepare such kind of food, please do not offer it to customers. Yours faithfully, Lettisha James
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to raise my concern about the meal we had at your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
restaurant
last week. I visited your eatery last Sunday to enjoy dinner with my family.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
heard about your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
restaurant
on the radio and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thought
to give it a try.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
the meal experience was disappointing.

When we entered your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
restaurant
, we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
saw
a special menu written on a board and one of the items
was fried
rice with fish curry. We decided to try it, which we later regretted
deeply
. When we
were served
the dish, we found
Possible spelling mistake. 'chilli' is British English.
chilli
powder on the surface of the fish. After we inquired about it, one of your attendants
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
told
that they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
it off one hour after marinating with
Possible spelling mistake. 'chilli' is British English.
chilli
powder with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
other ingredients.
Even though
we felt terrible about it, we continued our meal. The dish tasted mediocre, not up to our expectation at all. Unfortunately, my son
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
feeling
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
after we reached
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
home and
he disgorged twice.

I had a high expectation from your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
restaurant
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
equally
frustrated. I would
really
appreciate if you could take proper action about this inconvenience that we had due to the food we ate at your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
restaurant
.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
instruct your chefs to follow proper hygienic manner and if they do not know how to prepare such kind of food,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
do not offer it to customers.

Yours
faithfully
,

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Lettisha
James
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS letter You took your family to a nearby restaurant. You were disappointed with the meal and wish to complain to the manager. v. 6

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
236 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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