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You took your family to a nearby restaurant. You were disappointed with the meal and wish to complain to the manager. v.2

You took your family to a nearby restaurant. You were disappointed with the meal and wish to complain to the manager. v. 2
Dear Sir or Madam, I am a regular diner at your restaurant on Madison Avenue. I am writing to express my discontent with the meal that I and my family had at your restaurant last Thursday. I am hoping that you would take actions to improve your food quality and maintain your reputation. Recently, I have been promoted to the Senior Internal Auditor in my office and to celebrate this event, I took my family out to one of your outlets on Madison Avenue. We ordered four servings of shrimp fried rice, but we were shocked to discover that the shrimp in our serving was undercooked and had a pungent odour. After complaining about it to the supervisor, we were told that the restaurant had run out of shrimps - not a valid excuse for a distinguished restaurant like yours. You can understand my frustration when my family and I had to leave the restaurant empty stomach and disappointment. My intention in writing this letter is to ask you to issue a "show cause notice" to the supervisor at your restaurant, and disseminate instructions to all your staff to hold a modicum of buffer stock for every item, just in case the restaurant runs out of that item and so that no customer experiences a humiliation. Yours faithfully, Muhammad Sameed
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am a regular diner at your
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restaurant
on Madison Avenue. I am writing to express my discontent with the meal that I and my family had at your
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restaurant
last Thursday.
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I
am hoping that you would take actions to
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improve
your food quality and maintain your reputation.

Recently, I have
been promoted
to the Senior Internal Auditor in my office and to celebrate this
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event
, I took my family out to one of your outlets on Madison Avenue. We ordered four servings of shrimp fried rice,
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but
we
were shocked
to discover that the shrimp in our serving was
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undercooked
and had a pungent
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odour
. After complaining about it to the supervisor, we were
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told
that the
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restaurant
had run out of shrimps
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not a valid excuse for a distinguished
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restaurant
like yours. You can understand my frustration when my family and I had to
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leave
the
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restaurant
empty stomach and disappointment.

My intention in writing this letter is to ask you to issue a
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"
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show
cause notice
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"
to the supervisor at your
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restaurant
, and disseminate instructions to all your staff to hold a modicum of buffer stock for every item,
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just
in case the
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restaurant
runs out of that item and
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so
that no customer experiences a humiliation.

Yours
faithfully
,

Muhammad
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Sameed
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS letter You took your family to a nearby restaurant. You were disappointed with the meal and wish to complain to the manager. v. 2

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
219 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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