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You took your family to a nearby restaurant. You were disappointed with the meal and wish to complain to the manager. v.3

You took your family to a nearby restaurant. You were disappointed with the meal and wish to complain to the manager. v. 3
Dear Sir or Madam, I visited your restaurant on 11th May with my family to celebrate my sister’s birthday. We usually enjoy your food but this time it was disappointing. I am hoping that you would keep your food quality intact and take action regarding the bad dining experience we have had. We have always considered your restaurant as the most classy French cuisine place in town. Since my sister lives in France, we dine at your restaurant every time she is in our country. This time it was even more special as we were celebrating her birthday. But the whole event was ruined due to the dishes we were served. I suppose you can imagine our disappointment when we found the onion soup absolutely inedible. It was cold, and it appeared your chef did not stir it well while cooking. Some clogs of flour were visible in the soup. Moreover, the main course was cold and not up to our expectation. They tasted very ordinary and hackneyed but we paid almost thrice for these items! We asked a waitress about the reasons and she had no plausible excuse for that. I am looking forward to hearing that you have taken the necessary steps to maintain your reputation and food quality. Otherwise, you have already lost a customer. Yours faithfully, Elizabeth Harley
Dear Sir or Madam,

I visited your restaurant on 11th May with my family to celebrate my sister’s birthday. We
usually
enjoy your food
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but
this time it was disappointing. I am hoping that you would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
your food quality intact and take action regarding the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
dining experience we have had.

We have always considered your restaurant as the most classy French cuisine place in town. Since my sister
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
in France, we dine at your restaurant every time she is in our country. This time it was even more special as we were celebrating her birthday.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
the whole
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
event
was ruined
due to the dishes we
were served
.

I suppose you can imagine our disappointment when we found the onion soup
absolutely
inedible. It was
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cold
, and it appeared your chef did not stir it well while cooking.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
clogs of flour were visible in the soup.
Moreover
, the main course was
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cold
and not up to our expectation. They tasted
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
ordinary and hackneyed
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
we paid almost thrice for these items! We asked a waitress about the
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
reasons and
she had no plausible excuse for that.

I am looking forward to hearing that you have taken the necessary steps to maintain your reputation and food quality.
Otherwise
, you have already lost a customer.

Yours
faithfully
,

Elizabeth Harley
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS letter You took your family to a nearby restaurant. You were disappointed with the meal and wish to complain to the manager. v. 3

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
221 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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