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You have finished a course. Write a letter to the course organizer to give yourfeedback. In your letter include: ▪the details of the course▪what you enjoyed during the course▪any suggestions you would haveWrite at least 150 words. v.2

You have finished a course. Write a letter to the course organizer to give yourfeedback. In your letter include: ▪the details of the course▪what you enjoyed during the course▪any suggestions you would have v. 2
Dear Sir or Madam, This is Aidin Farughi. I am writing to you to inform you about my opinions on one of your courses based on my experience. I have just finished the rotary systems course. Pupils were educated about differences between system and how to operate each one by Dr. Jafarzade. It took place at one of your institute’s branches in Mashhad and was held for one week, from june 2nd till 9th. What I loved most about the course is that it was a hand on type. Each trainee had a chance to try the systems in practice while being supervised by a professional. From my point of view, knowledge got by experience is far better than what is learned simply by slides and speeches. I believe there are some actions that could be taken to even better up the course. First, you can provide patients in order to make practice on an actual tooth in the oral cavity rather than a doll with some extracted animal teeth. Second, it would be best to add to the supervised practices’ sessions. As I told, I am fond of these sessions. I hope you find my letter helpful. Yours Truly. A. Farughi
Dear Sir or Madam,

This is Aidin
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Farughi
. I am writing to you to inform you about my opinions on one of your
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courses
based on my experience. I have
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just
finished the rotary systems
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
. Pupils
were educated
about differences between system and how to operate each one by Dr.
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Jafarzade
. It took place at one of your institute’s branches in Mashhad and
was held
for one week, from
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june
2nd till 9th.

What I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
loved
most about the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
is that it was a hand on type. Each trainee had a chance to try the systems in practice while
being supervised
by a professional. From my point of view, knowledge
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
by experience is far better than what
is learned
simply
by slides and speeches.

I believe there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
actions that could
be taken
to even better up the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
.
First
, you can provide patients in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
practice on an actual tooth in the oral cavity
rather
than a doll with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
extracted animal teeth. Second, it would be best to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
add
to the supervised practices’ sessions. As I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
told
, I am fond of these sessions.

I hope you find my letter helpful.

Yours
Truly
.

A.
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Farughi
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS letter You have finished a course. Write a letter to the course organizer to give yourfeedback. In your letter include: ▪the details of the course▪what you enjoyed during the course▪any suggestions you would have v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
201 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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