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You are going on to a month-long training programme in the UK and know that the head of the course would like one of the participants to be the social events’ organizer. Write a letter to the Training Organizer. In your letter: •express your interest in v.4

You are going on to a month-long training programme in the UK and know that the head of the course would like one of the participants to be the social events’ organizer. Write a letter to the Training Organizer. In your letter: •express your interest in v. 4
Dear Sir/ Madam, I am member of training programmer which is held in the UK. I have come to know that the course head wants one participant to work as a social events’ organizer. Therefore, I am writing this letter to esquire about more information about this matter. I was thrilled to hear that your head wants a person who takes care of social events. As I am aware about your company well and have seen all your training sessions. I really like the social events which organized by your company. However, I would like to know more about these events. In this case, how many programmers are run by your company? Is your company provides accommodation to spectators? Along with this, I would like to know do I have to fill application form to apply as a social events’ organizer. As you might read my profile during my selection in this training program. I am a professional to host these events. Further, I organized every event in our company and get award for this. If you give me a chance then I will not let you down. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Amanpreet
Dear Sir/ Madam,

I am member of training programmer which
is held
in the UK. I have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
to know that the course head wants one participant to work as a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
events’
organizer.
Therefore
, I am writing this letter to esquire about more information about this matter.

I
was thrilled
to hear that your head wants a person who takes care of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
events
. As I am aware about your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
well and have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
all your training sessions. I
really
like the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
events
which organized by your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
.

However
, I would like to know more about these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
events
.
In this case
, how
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
programmers
are run
by your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
? Is your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
provides accommodation to spectators? Along with this, I would like to know do I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
fill application form to apply as a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
events’
organizer.

“As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
you might read my profile during my selection in this training program. I am a professional to host these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
events
.
Further
, I organized every
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
event
in our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
award for this. If you give me a chance then I will not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
you down.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours
faithfully
,

Possible spelling mistake found.
Amanpreet
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS letter You are going on to a month-long training programme in the UK and know that the head of the course would like one of the participants to be the social events’ organizer. Write a letter to the Training Organizer. In your letter: •express your interest in v. 4

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
197 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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