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You are going on a month training program to the UK and know that the head of the course would like one of the participants to be the social events organizer Write a letter to the Training Organizer In your letter express your interest in the role request v.2

You are going on a month training program to the UK and know that the head of the course would like one of the participants to be the social events organizer Write a letter to the Training Organizer In your letter express your interest in the role request v. 2
Dear Sir/Madam, I am quite excited to attend the one-month training program and I just come to know that the head of the course is looking for someone who has the skills to handle social events. Therefore, I am writing to express my interest in the role of social events organizer in the upcoming training program in the United Kingdom. Furthermore, I would like to know about the duration, venue and team members of the events. I would really appreciate it if you could provide the role and responsibilities for this position. Moreover, I am quite interested to know more about the theme of the event. It is worth to mention here that I have organized several events during the college and university courses. I have also earned appreciation certificates from the event organizers. I have performed quite well and I am capable to handle large sizes of the team and event as well. Thus, I believe that I am a qualified and experienced person for this role. Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to hearing from you at your earliest convenience. Yours faithfully, Deepak Sharma
Dear Sir/Madam,

I am quite excited to attend the one-month training program and I
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to know that the head of the course is looking for someone who has the
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skills
to handle social
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events
.
Therefore
, I am writing to express my interest in the role of social
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organizer in the upcoming training program in the United Kingdom.

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, I would like to know about the duration, venue and team members of the
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events
. I would
really
appreciate it if you could provide the role and responsibilities for this position.
Moreover
, I am quite interested to know more about the theme of the
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event
.

It is worth to mention here that I have organized several
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events
during the college and university courses. I have
also
earned appreciation certificates from the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
event
organizers. I have performed quite
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well and
I am capable to handle large sizes of the team and
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event
as well
.
Thus
, I believe that I am a qualified and experienced person for this role.

Thank you for your time and consideration.

I look forward to hearing from you at your earliest convenience.

Yours
faithfully
,

Deepak Sharma
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IELTS letter You are going on a month training program to the UK and know that the head of the course would like one of the participants to be the social events organizer Write a letter to the Training Organizer In your letter express your interest in the role request v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
189 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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