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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task Although you have never formally studied computing you have always been interested in computers You have just read about a computer course that really interests you but it is only for people who have complete v.1

Although you have never formally studied computing you have always been interested in computers You have just read about a computer course that really interests you but it is only for people who have complete v. 1
Dear Sir, I am writing this to request you to accept my enrollment in the computer course you are organising. From many days I am planning to join in a computer training center, but could not be done because of my busy schedule in different activities. During day time I have to rush to my college and after that I will take tuitions to kids at my residence and also at night I will be going for part-time job. because of this routine till now I am not able to learn minimum basics of computers. I came to notice that you are going to teach the students who has completed their elementary course but I request to allow me to your classes as I was very enthusiastic to learn this and if you accept me I will adjust my schedule, as learning this is most important to me. Please make me an exception to enter in learning the computer course so that I will enroll myself in the course. I will be waiting to hear from you soon. Thanking you. Yours sincerely, Abc
Dear Sir,

I am writing this to request you to accept my enrollment in the computer course you are
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days I am planning to
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be done
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because
of my busy schedule in
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different
activities. During day time I
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have to
rush to my college and after that I will take
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tuitions
to kids at my residence and
also
at night I will be going for part-time job.
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because
of this routine till
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now
I am not able to learn minimum basics of computers. I came to notice that you are going to teach the students who
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has
completed their elementary course
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but
I request to
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allow
me to your classes as I was
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very
enthusiastic to learn this and if you accept me I will adjust my schedule, as learning this is most
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important
to me.
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Please
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make
me an exception to enter in learning the computer course
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so
that I will enroll myself in the course.

I will be waiting to hear from you
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soon
. Thanking you.

Yours
sincerely
,

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Abc
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS letter Although you have never formally studied computing you have always been interested in computers You have just read about a computer course that really interests you but it is only for people who have complete v. 1

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5 paragraphs
182 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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